Chasing Death
Author: Suzainie

Here comes my insights about your story. 🐱🐱

Plot - Honestly your plot is totally amazing and the story is too exaggerated. It really fits your genre paranormal or I must say it is really a fiction. I can't believe anything that happened in your story. All the time that I was reading this, I really put myself in the story that I really believe I'm one of them and right now I'm still stuck. Like let's say I'm still craving for more chapter that I can't accept the ending. But what can I do it's the end. Good job for making this story.

Blurb - It's not that perfect and appealing but of course there's no perfect in the world it's very understandable. I notice that your blurb didn't give much impact to the audience to be captivated by your story. But of course I'm not saying you should change it cause the story was still interesting. This is just what I feel.

Technicalities - We know that each and everyone of the writers have these errors that's why it's understandable and also these is nit a bother to me. You can still fix these if you will start to edit your story.

Characteristics of your Characters - I've gota hard time understanding the characteristics of Felix at first but thankfully you give justice to his characteristics at the 16 to 19 chapters I think. So good job that. While in the other characters there's no problem in them.

Name of your Characters - Good job to these. Honestly the name of characters is one of the factor in a story to captivate your readers. And you have a nice name of your characters.

Cover - I like the font but not the whole cover. It's to dark that the color red and black didn't go well to the face of your icon in the cover. And also it's not showing what the content of your story but still the cover is nice.

Descriptive Words - I congratulate you to these. You have descriptive words in English and Filipino. I also notice that your so fluent in using Filipino words. Some of them are new to me. It's my first time to encounter such Filipino words so I still need to asked my cousin who is fluent in Filipino. And that's why I understand a little 'cause honestly I'm not really good at Filipino even though I'm half Filipino. So congrats.

Mental Images - I have a hard time creating some mental images in my mind just to imagine what kind of scene you have 'cause honestly I'm so confused that I have to force myself to create mental images where it is supposed to be your job as a writer. These are important especially your creating a fiction story, a paranormal. Creating mental images is like you are giving the readers the specific scene of your story which they can imagine. Like it will not be hard for them to be one of your story. If that's happen they can fully understand and feel your story. Then you can leave an impact to them which they can never forget.

I give you 96/100%

So this is the end of my insights about your story.

Suggestions - Create mental images I know and I believe you can do this. Improve more your writing skills. You need to nourish it more. I know it can't be perfect but still it's important that you can improve in that field.

My Advice - Keep writing and keep enjoying every second you spend your time writing your story. Cause each time you write it is a treasure. Writing is a passion, that's what you like and love to do. As a writer your job is to put words on paper and correct them later. Never mind people suggesting you to correct it even though you are still writing. Let them wait. It's not like you are working to them. Like I said earlier just enjoy writing. What I said to you is just merely my opinion. You doesn't need to follow them. But of course I wish and hope it well help you.

I hope this critique of mine help you a lot. If you still want my insights about your story you can come back here anytime. ❤❤