Agent Platinum
Author: cheeeley

Here comes my insights about your story. 🐱🐱

Connection to the Genre - I want to clarify somethings here with you. It was stated in your form that your genre is action well to tell you the truth I can't agree to that. While reading your story I've notice that you're more into solving cases, finding the killer/culprit, interrogating suspects, unfolding the truths behind Cassandra's life and so on. These explains that your story is more suitable in Mystery/Thriller genre although it has a bit of action but still Mystery/Thriller suits it the most. Don't you agree so? So because of that in criticizing your story I've applied what I learn in writing Mystery/Thriller story.

Title - I can't seem to understand why you titled it Agent Platinum. It's confusing. I can't find the connection of your title in your story. Well I'm not suggesting you should change it but I want to be enlighten.

Plot - You have a great ideas in creating this plot. Your story is improving a long the way each chapter. I can really tell that you're a knowledgeable person while reading your story. I bet you have some collections of books regarding about mystery or solving cases or you have read some articles. I can't say anymore words about your plot 'cause the content of your story was enough for you to make me speechless.

Blurb - You're blurb was not that attractive for me but it doesn't mean you need to change it. It is still okay.

Three Act Structure - This is really important especially you are writing a mystery/thriller with a bit of an action. Since your story is not yet complete I can't really tell you that you have perfectly done this. First is the Act 1 you have done this perfectly 'cause you've hooked me to read more of your story. Second the Act 2 I must congratulate you in this you have given your protagonist an amazing conflict in her life and I'm empress that you are giving your character her own way in solving her problem but you're guiding her. That's what make your story feel realible to me it's like I've been thrown to their dimension. Since you don't have an ending yet I can't tell if you have done the Act 3 so for now let's end it here.

Clues and Red Herrings - In these part you are definitely good. You are giving clues whenever your protagonist and her sidekick would solve a case with so much thrill in it. You're giving clues but you are throwing a barrelful of red herrings so that your readers would not know who's the killer too early and that's good.

Technicalities - All writers have these errors. Yours doesn't have that much but you need to edit it after you complete your story but for now stick on completing it.

I give you 98/100%

So this is the end of my insights about your story.

Suggestions - Change your genre into Mystery/Thriller because it is really suitable that way but if you don't want to change it I'll respect you after all it's your story. To improve more your writing skills and intellectual skills I suggest you should read and read more it is helpful that way. Reads other writers works, you can search some details in the google, read books and ect.

My advice - Since you are writing a mystery you really need to leave a trail of clues. Don't end a case without giving your readers some clues who is the killer. You know readers want to know who did it and why. You have done these thing but I'm just saying so you don't forget it. Just write without thinking it is better that way and you can still edit it afterwards. Writing is an art and creativity takes courage just like Henri Matisse said. So don't stress yourself. Just enjoy writing and continue your passion. God bless you.

I hope this critique of mine help you a lot. If you still want my insights about your story you can come back here anytime. ❤❤