Reviewer: BloodyTurtle

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Wrong Number

By @kylsyss

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Cover/Blurb/Title

Cover • the cover isn't bad, but it's a little boring. It gets to the point of the story, though. I feel like the picture used could be better quality.

Blurb • The blurb isn't too great. It starts off with the first part of the first chapter. When us using quotes, you should use ones from later in the story that are more meaningful. That, and the grammar out of the quote wasn't great. I saw a lowercase I... Describe the story better after the section from the story.

Title •  the title isn't the most original. I recommend you make it something a little less cliche. Also, you didn't even bother to make it uppercase...

Descriptions

There is a single word I can use for this part of the review: none. There weren't descriptions. I couldn't see anything but the image of a phone being texted on, and I don't even know what the phone looks like.

Characters

So, it's a fanfic, so yeah characters aren't original. The dialogue seems like an actual talk, but it's highly unrealistic. The characters seem way to bipolar and don't behave how I feel they would. But it's fanfic, so the point is to make them behave however you want. (I don't really know the person the fanfic is about, but I highly doubt he behaves how you made him.)

Plot/General Writing

The pacing is way to fast, and the story seems not to have a plot. The actions of the characters make seemingly no sense other than creating the illusion that they might, as the point of fanfic is to make characters or people do whatever you wish. This, putting it bluntly, ISN'T a book. It's just a bunch of back and forth texts, and it's not professional. The writing isn't special, as many have fanfic like this. It's cliche. A famous person calling or texting a number accidentally is nothing new...

Grammar

So, I don't know if I should bother here. They're texting, so the sucky grammar was done purposefully. The whole thing was a grammar mistake. I honestly can say, the simplest of spelling mistakes were made.

Reader Engagement

I wasn't engaged at all. The blurb turned me off right away. I didn't even open the book, and the terrible grammar and poorly written blurb already make me decline reading. But it will engage many, as it simply being a fanfic gets you tons of praise.

Overall

This isn't a book that should've been requested for a review, in all honesty. First, it's already plenty popular. Second, I don't think you thought this out. The story isn't a book. It's more of something you'd find in random. I'm sorry that this was harsh, but this simply wasn't something that was thought through when written. I recommend this to anyone who likes Jack Grazer and will read anything written about him, no matter how poor quality.

.25 star out of 5

Good luck, lollipop!