Reviewer: BloodyTurtle

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Reclamation

By @Alpacat

Amora-Tae is a Jir, daughter of the Guider of the Treestalker Clan, and thoroughly used to fighting. For survival, for fun, and soon, for everything she knows. Amora-Tae spent her first years believing she would lead a normal life as a Guider: find a suitable mate, raise a family, lead her Clan, forge alliances, and die. Yet, when her life is wracked by loss and chaos, and she finds an opportunity to to take her life by the horns and sinks her teeth into it, she realizes normal was never written into her life. She finds herself thrown headfirst into global events that threaten to push her whole world to a precipice, and must decide for herself how much she can really give, and where her loyalties and priorities lie.

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Cover/Blurb/Title

Cover • The cover looks nice. I can read everything, and all of the words are large enough. It's a good cover.

Blurb • The blurb is good. It's vague, which is a good thing. It mentions the main details for starting it. I found maybe one grammar mistake in it, but it wasn't very big.

Title • The title is good for the story, but a bit overused. A lot of stories go by the title, which shouldn't be surprising since it's a one word title. I always recommend more than one word titles. (Keeping that in mind, adding "the" in the beginning is something I wouldn't recommend to make it more than one word.)

Descriptions
The descriptions are very nice. I could easily visualize everything. The descriptions of actions, events, and the races are very nice. Maybe a bit more on each character, as it takes a while to accurately visualize. I didn't realize the main character had tusks until her child was birthed.

Characters
The characters are nice. I enjoy that this story has a bunch of new races to it, which is fun and creative. They have strong personalities. The designs for each race are great. However, I found names get a bit confusing. With all of the two part names, it's hard to keep track of who's who. But that's one of the race details, so it shouldn't be a turn off for too many people.

Plot/General Writing
The pacing is nice. It's not too fast or slow. The plot is creative, especially since new races are at play. I found this world curious, and I wished to explore it. The writing style is very nice, and it's written well. I don't have any cliche complains or anything, and I found the storyline so far good. However, I found one thing not to my liking. The beginning throws so much info at the reader at once that most is forgotten right away. I recommend you add these facts in with the story, and don't just bombard the reader all at once.

Grammar
I'm actually quite satisfied with this. I found almost no mistakes. So, I really don't have much to say here. Maybe slim over and make sure everything's in order, but this section is good for the most part.

Reader Engagement
I found myself engaged. It starts off with someone freaking giving birth! That's a way of catching the reader right off the bat. Each chapter ends well, and it's good for catching the eye.

Overall
This is a nicely written story. I recommend this for anyone looking for a good, new world with new ideas. So, fantasy readers who like new races, check this out. But you need to blend the prologue with the rest of the story. It'd make it a lot easier to understand.

4.5 stars out of 5

Good luck, lollipop!