Reviewer: BloodyTurtle

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Misfits

By @usercorgis

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Cover/Blurb/Title

Cover • The cover looks very nice. I can read everything clearly. But I recommend you make the author name and quote a little bigger. But the rest is good.

Blurb • The blurb fits well, and it has good grammar. The story is perfectly vague. But I recommend you add a strong quote to the beginning.

Title • Title is good. Out of laziness on my part, I didn't put the full name. But it's a good name since it's more than just "Misfits."

Descriptions

The descriptions for actions and character emotion are very nice. I could easily picture them. But I couldn't visualize the places very well, though I could imagine some aspects. Also, the characters have practically no description. Actually, I don't think I noticed any character design when reading. That's something you should definitely mention in the first chapter when the characters are shown.

Characters

The characters are good. I've he a rough idea of character personality, though it could've been fleshed out a bit more so it was stronger. But it's the beginning, so it's good for now. I didn't get much for design, as I mentioned. Also, I like that they're all supernaturals, though maybe one human would be cool and random. But that's just a thought.

Plot/General Writing

The writing style is good. I enjoyed how you worded things, and actions were described nicely. The pacing seems a little slow, though. Not much happened in the first two chapters. The plot of having a group of people defending a huge group of people is a little cliche, but it can be done right to be made ones own. Also, paranormal creatures being outcastes and protecting humans though they outcast them doesn't seem entirely new, but it can be done properly.

Grammar

The grammar is okay. Not great, in all honesty. Lots of basic mistakes are made, though I didn't see any spelling mistakes. But you have ones where you need semicolons, periods, commas, etc. maybe download grammarly onto a computer, as it helps with simple mistakes. Or you could hire an editor on Wattpad. But you could also have someone proof read, as that can be useful too.

Reader Engagement

I was a little engaged while reading. I was curious of the dust at first, but my curiosity ran dry when nothing really happened in two chapters. It was a little boring, and my focus wasn't all on it since it couldn't catch it.

Overall

This story certainly has potential. It just needs to move a little faster and possibly be more engaging. Also, descriptions are a must for it. But it's a good story other than that. I recommend this to people who like supernatural/adventure stories.

3 stars out of 5

Good luck, lollipop!