Reviewer: flyme2them00n

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Lost - Book 1 (The Falling City Series)

By parnikalal

»There was a note on the table

     We got them.

     Now its your turn.

      Felicity Hudson knows in Cannan everyone is preparing for a war outside the Underground city and her destiny is also to fight alongside them.

      With her sister's unexplained disappearance three years ago,Felicity will soon face the adventure of a lifetime. People from past will reappear which will trigger an action packed journey.Secrets will be revealed that will change the way Felicity would look at the truth and Cannan.

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Cover/Blurb/Title

Cover • Pretty good. I like the picture you used. I assume that's what the main character looks like. I can read the text clearly and nothing's too striking or hard to see. Nice job.

Blurb • Very good. Mysterious and thrilling. I would like to know a little bit more about Felicity in the blurb, as well as what kind of place Cannan and the Underground city is.

Title • Not bad. Not super striking but not super boring. I recommend putting a little bit about what the Falling City exactly is (is it Cannan or the Underground?) and why it's called that.

Descriptions

Your descriptions are very good! I like how you take the time to explain the things that are important to her in detail. I can clearly imagine everything you describe.

Characters

I loved how you took the time to introduce every character you bring into your story. I like the "opposite twin" thing you did and contradicted that with their names, Felicity and Nirvana. I feel like they have backstories, but you haven't brought that aspect in them out yet. I'd like to see more of that.

Plot/General Writing

Your plot is very good! Your flashbacks are often, but not awkward. They blend into the present tense writing. The story doesn't move too slow, but not too fast either. It's super engaging and really well-written. Good job!

Grammar

Excellent grammar. I didn't see a lot of major mistakes. I'll just mention reading it to yourself slow a chapter at a time to see if you have any mistakes.

Reader Engagement

I have to say, this book had me craving more. It's so so good!

Overall

4 stars out of 5

You are truly an amazing writer. I am not surprised at all to have found out this was on the Hot List. Keep pushing forward and you'll do so great!

Good luck, lollipop!