Reviewer: flyme2them00n

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His Favorite Ginger 

By Tophermann

SUMMARY

Alejandro Bale is the illest-tempered, scaring-ly sassy, frighteningly naughty, stinkingly rich and strikingly attractive redhead you'll ever see and has just transferred to Crescent High.

The 'unfortunate' who falls with his bare head over heels happens to be the cliche badboy player, Grayson Jackson who changes lovers than underwear and destroys any human anytime, anyhow or anyway he desires.

And now he has to learn that an happily-ever-after doesn't appear on a platinum platter by just possessing the perfect qualities when crazy, Cupid-induced coincidences catalyze their chemistry and bad bashes badder.

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Cover/Blurb/Title

Cover • Not bad. There's nothing I find odd or particularly striking, so I say you did a nice job. If you want more critiques on it, feel free to ask around the Wattpad community for tips.

Blurb • Pretty good. It lures me and gives good description. I don't think you need to change anything. Again, ask around to see if anyone else thinks differently.

Title • I have to say, the "bad boy" cliche had me doubting this a little, mostly because a lot of the LGBT+ books I see on my homepage (and hetero too) have something to do with "The Bad Boy". However, it really started to grow on me once I started reading. I can't wait for more!

Descriptions

Out of all the descriptions you included in the story, the ones that struck me the most were the relationships between your characters and the descriptions of the characters themselves. I'm definitely one for character descriptions so it's safe to say that you've satisfied me.

Characters

Wow! I know that's a terrible beginning to a critique but seriously. I am in love with your characters. From the way Al stutters to the way Kara acts around her boyfriend, it all seems so realistic and I love it. You don't put the "blazing gay" aspect into either of the main characters which I appreciate since there are people out there that act just as straight people act (if that was offensive I'm so sorry, I can't type out my feelings).

Plot/General Writing

The plot has a nice, fluid progression. It's not too fast, nor is it too slow. The story itself is very well written, with a professional tone, well-developed characters, and an overall charming aspect. I noticed that you even included mini character profiles in the middle of the story for both of the main characters. It was great to see that you've put that much thought into how you have written them to be.

Grammar

Your grammar is very good. I didn't see much of any errors and I have no complaints. Well done!

Reader Engagement

I felt pretty engaged while I was reading. Each chapter ending ties the chapters together really well. I also have no complaints or criticism for this part.

Overall

4 stars out of 5

I will rate this a four out of five stars. I will admit, I am not completely used to reading LGBT+ works; I might need to change that. Your story blew me away though! I connected with your characters and I really like how you've written them. Very well done!

Good luck, lollipop!