Reviewer: weasleyqueen-

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Emmeline

By EWinters

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"Let me go." I cried, struggling to get out of his grasp. Joker smirked."Scared of me? Why?" "Because I can see what you are capable of. And I know you could do it to me as well." I whispered, trying desperately to move away from his nearing lips."Oh I know I could." his lips stopped an inch away from mine and I froze, not wanting any of my struggling to make my mouth touch his.I raised my leg and kicked him away. He combined a loud groan of pain with laughter. As he regained his strength, I silently cursed myself for not using this time to run away. But I knew that he would've caught me anyway."I thought you were scared?" he said, huffing and laughing."Yes. I am terrified. But I am not weak." ***Waking up, Emmeline Reine didn't know who she was or why she is in an abandoned building, gun pointed at her. Little did she know, The Joker has been looking for her for years and takes her amnesia as an oppurtunity to get her back.

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Cover/Blurb/Title

Cover • I love it! It's nice and looks like a lot of effort was put into it. It goes well with the title.

Blurb • It's a little overwhelming but not at the same time. But the last part is a good hook to draw readers into reading your story. I would probably want to read the book after seeing the cover and blurb. Make sure you fix the opportunity at the end of it because it's misspelled.

Title • It's a little basic. Now this is where it gets me. The title sounds boring but the cover is intriguing. Try to add a little more to it at the end. Like how it's Harry Potter and the Sorcerers Stone, or Percy Jackson the Lightning Thief.

Descriptions

I like the descriptions. It paints a vivid picture of what's happening in the story. However I would focus just a little bit more on what the characters look like. The person who was holding Emmeline was very well described but I had no idea what Emmeline looked like until the second chapter.

Characters

It's all quite confusing. You quickly introduced one person before killing him, and the one who held her captive also died. It leaves the reader more confused then excited to read more.

Plot/General Writing

I have no idea what's happening. In my opinion it feels too rushed in the first chapter, and then goes slow in the second. All of the flashbacks are a little confusing as there are so many. But the mystery of her old life is interesting.

Grammar

You're grammar is good. There are very few mistakes. The paragraph breaks are correct and it makes the story have a good flow to it.

Reader Engagement

I wouldn't recommend you to say "Thank you for your read and vote/comment." It sounds like they're supposed to and most likely will be annoyed by it. Instead you could say "Thank you if you..." That would sound better and readers will be more likely to vote, comment, etc.

Overall

3 stars out of 5

I have very mixed feelings about it. It's so good at some points, but it can get really confusing. I would advise you to reread it and try to add in or clarify some of the things I was talking about. But I enjoyed doing this review!

Good luck, lollipop!