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@queeny120 | Crushed

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(1) Grammar, Spelling & Sentance Structure

There were many grammatical and spelling mistakes in the first 3 chapters of your book. And immediately, I was turned off. Readers generally don't actively look for grammatical or spelling errors in any kind of text/document. But when there are a lot such mistakes, they tend to be really obvious, and it removes any type of coherency or enjoyability from the reading experience.

That said, these kinds of mistakes are very, very easy to fix. And my advice would be to use Grammarly — it's free, and it works really well.

Don't rob your readers from the opportunity to experience your book because of simple mistakes here and there.

(2) Characters & Plot

Personally, I did not really like the personalities of the characters in your book. This is just my opinion, and it may not apply to everybody, but from what I read, I felt that the characters were immature and kinda cringey. There wasn't much from the characters that I liked or could relate to.

Aria behaves very predictably. She's the stereotypical nerdy girl who isn't afraid to stand up for herself and her friends, and who also happens to be childhood best friends with the popular boy next door — this trope has been done so many times now.

There's nothing wrong with being cliché. But naturally, it would only mean that your story would be competing in a highly saturated genre and that your book may not be given the opportunity to stand-out. After all, there might be someone out there who is doing the same story, but better and faster than you.

My advice would be to tweak Aria's characters a little to give her some variation and depth. I like that Tristan doesn't ignore Aria when he becomes popular, but there has to be more — What makes your book and characters different?

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