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Book: On The Tracks

Title (5/5)
The title definitely suits the story. You can tell that the story has something to do with cars or bikes. Some people might say that titles that show what the story is about easily aren't really good to use but I beg to differ. I think it makes you know what you're getting yourself into when you read the book and I like that. A major plus for me is the simplicity of it which is why I gave you the full points!

Book Cover (5/5)
I really love the book cover! There isn't too much font, too much details to crowd it and I think that's the best approach! It's always better to go simple with your cover instead of putting too many fonts and colors which may overcrowd it and turn the reader away. This cover actually drew me in more that I expected and I think the font and the background went nicely together so well done!

Blurb (10/10)
The blurb is really nice and sweet. I like it! I get to know the two main characters in the story, I get a sense of suspense and thrill and I love the ending. It really makes me wonder what's going to happen in the story and it makes me want to read the story even more so I really think you did a good job on that.

Plot (19/20)
The starting of the story is amazing! I like how you make her just come out of a race at the beginning. I think it's a really nice touch. I especially love that she's the racer and the rich one instead of the other way around since so many stories already have that and I just love girl power. #girlpowerrocks guys. Anyways, since I'm steering a little of off track (see what I did there ;) hehe), I really do think this plot is interesting. It's something I've never actually read before (not like I read much car stories but I might start because of this xD) but I'd have to say it really is engaging in my opinion. The only reason why I couldn't give it the full points is because I am yet to know when Raffaele is showing an appearance xD and I really want to know when haha. I actually read six chapters instead of five and I did not see him lol. You don't have to change the chapters though, I think it was really good for only six chapters read. However, I'm not gonna stop reading til I get my Raffaele fill :).

Grammar & Spelling (10/10)
Your grammar is literally almost perfect which shocks me so much because the book is more like a comedy novel in my opinion than wholehearted seriousness and I love it. I literally almost didn't see any grammar or spelling mistakes. If I did, there wasn't enough to actually take off a point for that so you are saved. Ultimate point is grammar and spelling was fantastic.

Character Development (10/10)
I love it! I love it! I love it! I love it! I thought all the characters were beautifully made. Everyone had like a little back story and they're not boring or flat like what most writers are trying to avoid. I really like Gabriella the most just because of her drive and her attitude. Just makes the story that much better to read!

Overall (59/60)
Your story is really good! I'm honestly shocked on how beautifully written it is. I love the little rivalry going on between Gabriella and her sister and it's just amazing! I love the characters as well and I love how you reveal details without info dumping or just dropping them like a bomb so that was nice also. I especially loved Avery and Leon's little relationship before and I can't wait to read more about her past because I really want to know why she was so adamant on getting the diamond. Keep up the good work and I hope your story grows more :)