Author : goldenroselover

Reviewer : MisSunshiney

• COVER : 10/10

• TITLE : 10/10

• BLURB : 9/10

It could use some polishing, otherwise I liked it and it attracted me into reading the story. :)

• CREATIVITY : 6/10

I like the idea, but not the way you tell the story. A lot is going on, but the major events - like James's death - pass too quickly, and little things - like girls preparing to go out - take forever. Also sometimes it feels like you're just quickly listing events, when they could use more of your attention. You could describe some moments more and the others a little less, so it would pull the readers in and keep them interested.

• PLOT : 7/15

I put the description for this one partly in the previous section. Although I realise it's just a draft and must add the story is improving from chapter to chapter. So keep going, you'll edit when your done. It has potential to develop into an amazing story. :D

• CHARACTERS : 6/ 10

Anika seems a little too much. Too ordinary, too tragic, too unexplained. Maddox is interesting, but his persona is still not evolved, he is just a puppet Anika bosses around. Do that, don't do that, hide. He had a life of his own and it should be included more.

• GRAMMAR : 10/15

• COMMUNICATION : 5/5
(With Readers)

• OVERALL IMPRESSION : 7/15

• TOTAL : 70/100