My Boyfriend is a Heavenly Body
StarHues

Cover: (9/10)
Very aesthetic! I love the cover scheme and images you have. The only thing is that it might be hard to read the smaller words if you haven't clicked on the story. Other than that, great cover.

Title: (9/10)
I'm intrigued. Is he an angel? Is he magic? Is he just really hot? Maybe all of the above. I'll have to find out. It's a bit long for a title, but I love long titles so yay!

Grammar + Spelling: (7/10)
Make sure that you use commas. I noticed a few run-on sentences, so before the word 'and' put a comma (where it is fitting.) Sometimes, in the middle of the sentence, you went from past tense to present tense. Try to pick one and stick to it, it makes the story less confusing.

Creativity: (10/10)
I've read very few (zero) gay fantasy stories about a suicidal man and a star, so I consider this story very creative. Also, most people catch the person right before they're about to commit suicide, but this dude actually jumps, so there's that. Refreshing and original. I find it really sweet that Altair is Louise's wish, his shooting star. Altair's like "you wished for me, I'll never leave you," and Louise is like "holy shit I'm being kidnapped." That part just made me laugh, so thanks for that.

Writing: (9/10)
You have a way with descriptions and expressing a character's feeling. In the beginning of the first chapter, you set the scene beautifully and the only way I could describe it in my mind was 'blue.' Not like in the sad way, like the beautiful shade of blue that you see when it's late at night. Your writing has a blue aesthetic, if that makes any sense.
The mood was set really well, and I can tell Louise really loves Stan right away. I felt the emotions he was feeling, and that's a sign of good writing. However, one thing that I picked up on was that Stan changed really quickly. He was flirty on the phone, and flat out told Louise that he was boring once they met. It didn't seem super realistic. Maybe make Stan less cold and more kind during the breakup, to make it more realistic. Unless, of course, there's a specific reason for this.
I have to admit, I liked the first chapter a lot, but the first half of the second chapter was more iffy to me. I think the dialogue should be more urgent than it was for the situation. Chapter three was very funny, though, and I liked it a lot!

Characters: (10/10)
The main character, in the beginning, seems so hopeful. He believes that he will get through anything as long as he is with Stan. It's beautiful, and then (spoiler alert lol), when Stan breaks up with him, he is wrecked. He decides to kill himself, which shows just how invested he was in his love and life with Stan. I felt bad for him. Altair is also a relatable character. He doesn't want to live for other people, but for himself.

Overall Story: (9/10)
Really creative and cute! I love your descriptions and style of writing. I'll definitely keep reading this when I have the time. Just go through and edit. Make sure you use commas, fix those run-on sentences, and stay in the same tense.

Total score: (63/70)
Great job and great story! Keep up the good work. Thanks for submitting and I'll get to your other review as soon as I can!