Chaos909386

4911 Tanner Bridge Road

Kansas City, Missouri 65101

September 12, 2017

Dear Alekei Lee Smith,

Hi, my name is Chaos909386, and I'm writing to you to talk about your books. I've been an avid reader and admirer of your stories for the past year. I've always loved reading your stories and could feel the emotions that you wrote them. I admire how eloquently you write, the chapter length, and how frequently you update the stories that aren't completed.

I've always looked at how you write the stories themselves. Your writing style is simple, but powerful. I have read fifty-eight of your one hundred seventy-seven stories, and loved how you told the stories so eloquently, almost like it's being written or remembered by your creative brain. How do you manage to write the stories so well because I struggle a lot of the times in making sure that it flows together quite well? I wish that I could get the plot to go with the flow perfectly and not rush things, but it sadly doesn't work usually. What would you advise me to do better as a writer? I mean I try my best to make all of my stories flow, but because of being in high school along with Art club and yearbook, I don't have that much time to write sadly. I love to read your writing style because it is still changing every time that I read one of your stories.

In one of your many stories, you write about abuse using sooooo much description almost as if you were in the character's position and every time I'm left awestruck and feel pissed off about the abuse and how no one in the main character's life goes and tries to get him out of the abusive atmosphere to try and help him heal. Every time I've read about the abuse, it always gets my blood boiling in rage about how unfair it is towards the character. Then with the way that you write about how the main character finds the friends that won't ever willingly betray him makes my heart melt from the inside out because of the tender love and care that is displayed. When you talk about the trials that the antagonists get, I always get a lot of vindictive satisfaction when I read that some are going to get their magic stripped, and live their life as a muggle makes me cackle like Bellatrix Lestrange herself on the inside. How you have Amelia Bones always mad and pissed at someone for trying to kill the main protagonist and his/her children and lay down the law makes me cry for about five to ten minutes sometimes because I can feel the emotion and the closure in the decision for a trial in your stories. I always love how you touch pregnancy in between a not-very-detailed pregnancy versus a super-detailed pregnancy it makes me feel good when I achieve the perfect amount of information about a pregnancy if it concerns the conception date, birth date, and labor cause I use how dilated it is what time the water broke and finally when the child or children are born.

While I love to read your stories, some things bug me big time. One of the things that drive me up the wall is how the name of Lestrange is spelled, when you write the name out, it's Estrange which you might just do because of copyright laws. Which if that's the case then that's understandable. For example, another name that is misspelled is Lucius, when you write it, it's spelled Lucious Malfoy, which irks me to no end. Regulus Black is spelled like Regulous Black, Fenrir Greyback is spelled like Frenrie. Peverell is spelled Prevelle in your stories, and Fleur is spelled Flure in the stories you write. These are the few mistakes that I notice when I read your stories.

I love how you describe the inheritance, may it be creature or just a magical inheritance, and how the rings are received. I've always thought the rings should probably be signet rings which very rarely have a gem inside it or around it since it would be hard to clean off if you seal an envelope with wax. I love how you write about how the rings break the blocks on the protagonist's magical core. It also breaks with any trust in someone or something because of a potion, and also breaks the potions that would make him/her love a person that they aren't attracted to or even the people and things that they hate. For example, when the protagonist's magical core is unblocked the person can connect with their core better than they were able to before. They would have to get a new wand or maybe even a staff depending on how powerful their core is, which works by feeling what woods, solid and liquid cores, and sometimes gemstones resonates with the magical core itself. When I write about those, I tend to forget to give the wand maker a name and briefly go over the wand/staff and what materials make it up. How do you remember to be descriptive when it comes to making the wand? Also with the animagus form I tend to also glance over it and just have the protagonist for my story use it when they absolutely need too, and don't go over the steps and processes to attain it. How on earth do you manage to do that?

I've read fifty-eight of your one hundred and seventy-seven stories, and love them. I'm completely addicted to reading them! Alekei, how do you manage to put so much feeling into your stories, while keeping yourself a fair distance away from the story at the same time? I struggle with that a lot and feel like a bad writer because of it. As I stated above, I do dislike how the first names of four characters are misspelled along with the ancient and noble house of Peverell, and how you don't create a will from an actual template. I've started to write last wills and testaments for my stories, so I know what goes into them and can feel a great sense of accomplishment when I'm done typing them up. Doing just some of these suggestions I think will make your writing go from great to awesome, maybe even perfect in my book, and I won't get caught up in the subtle mistakes of spelling and such. Out of your one hundred and seventy-seven stories, my favorite ones would have to be Retribution, Serpensortia, Phoenix Master, Dementor's Kiss, and Obliviate along with Petals and Thorns, Running Out of Time, Color Blind, The Snake In the Dark and finally Expecto Patronum. Are they some of your favorite stories that you've written, or is it your least favorite story that you've written yet because of how challenging it is? I look forward to your answers to my questions. Also thanks for taking the time to read this letter!

A fellow writer,

Chaos909386