Prologue - It interested me as I read on and was a pretty good hook for the whole book. I think you could've made the first line(s) even more intriguing because that's what determines whether someone will read your book so hook them in. I also liked the perspective of the prologue and how it seemed like a 2nd person (to me at least). - Rating: 4/5

I: First Assignment - I thought that this chapter wasn't all too bad. I didn't however, get drawn in as much as the Prologue had drawn me in. The words were descriptive and the plot was good. I think that you should switch from having everything centred to make it to the side because, well it doesn't seem necessary. It was a pretty long chapter, but not bad. - Rating: 3/5

II: Roses Are Blue - The opening line was intriguing made me wonder why? and made me want to read on. I think that the story is developing well. I liked the graphics that were added to it as well. I felt that the chapter was a bit long but still worth reading. - Rating: 3.5/5

III: Oikawa Junpei - I think the hook for this chapter could've been a bit more pulling in on the reader. Its plot is still great, and character development is coming along nicely. I also really like the video game controllers throughout the story. - Rating: 3.5/5

Overall: I thought the book was pretty good. The plot made sense. I think the book could've been a bit more intriguing and the centring every chapter was unnecessary but it doesn't change the quality of the book. - Rating: 7/10

Covers and Graphics: The cover is not bad but I think you could add the title to it and make it clearer. The graphics throughout the book were good like I said before, I liked the video game controllers. I think graphics could be scattered throughout the book, not only in the one chapter I saw them in. (Roses are Blue)

About The Book: The summary is short and sweet and I liked that. I feel like more tags could've been added, that way more people can discover your story, but they fit appropriately.

What You Can Work On: The biggest thing you can work on is just intriguing your readers. There are smaller things that can be worked on for example the length, but that is not as important as interesting your readers.

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