The chronicles of Wildheart: Wildpup of Jolteon Hollow by Diamond435

Genre: Fanfiction.

Chapters Reviewed: 8 Chapters.

Updated: Daily.

The chronicles of Wildheart: Wildpup of Jolteon Hollow is about a newborn Eevee who is destined to become a Jolteon like the rest of her family; however due to a sudden change of events, this new Eevee, named Willpup starts to wonder if she really wants to evolve into a Jolteon.

That's the one thing I like about this book. Not everyone can be what they are expected to be. If it's all you know, and you start to wonder if there's more when you are exposed to it. I like that the author explains that concept in the book, and will show what it's like to be introduced to something different.

From the last book that I have read from this author, I have noticed a bit of improvement in terms of style of writing, length, and even how the plot is introduced. It's clear to see that this little Eevee loves her family, and wants to make them proud, even to the point that she wants to be a warrior like her father. It's very realistic and shows that there was time placed into this story.

The chapters are still too short for my liking, but that can be a good thing to those wanting a quick read. Some people don't like reading much; however, with short chapters, the readers are limited to what their imagination can give. Now, I say this, but I can see the author is pushing towards longer chapters. For example, I love how the author wrote Chapter 3: Jolteon Hallow as it explains in a bit of detail what the setting of the story is. Being that these are made up places, it's good to give detail to help the reader imagine what the author is.

While this is there, there's still not much detail, and there are some chapters I feel like could be combined with others. This is just a matter of opinion though as I prefer reading longer chapters with a ton of detail. Detail is what I'm looking for in a good book. A piece of advice is to think quality over quantity. Yes, it is exciting to release a new chapter every day; however, if two chapters are pertaining to the same scene, with nothing exciting that distinguishes the two, like a cliffhanger or major plot twist, it can get a bit tiresome to read. True, having short chapters give an advantage into allowing the reader to read more, but if three chapters are very similar to each other, then it's probably best to combine them.

Another thing to watch out for is grammar. Besides chapter length, this is something I heavily look for in a good book. Good news, there aren't many grammar mistakes. Some chapters have very little that I can dismiss them until reading it a fourth time. However, there are a bit of inconsistency in dialogue. I once had a teacher back in high school who explained to everyone that dialogue will be one of the hardest things to write in a story. While I'll disagree with her, I can see how this can be a problem.

So, I've decided to lay out some simple rules when it comes to dialogue that anyone can watch out for when writing. The first one, the author of this book has engrained in her mind really well. If a character is speaking in two paragraphs (one right after the other), you don't need to end the first one with a closing quotation mark. That does mean that you have to start the next paragraph with a quotation mark, to indicate that the someone is still speaking.

Also, when it comes to dialogue, always make sure the first part ends in a comma, unless stressed with a question mark or explanation point. Periods are not needed if there is a closing quotation mark followed by a bit of information, like who said the quote. This is a small detail I've seen multiple times, and it goes both ways in the sense that commas need to be used more often in dialogue.

It bothers me that it may seem like a run-on sentence; however, that's the English language for you as it's not considered one. I have noticed that the sentence structures are bit longer. As a writer, make sure that there are some simple sentences scattered in the story. Reading too much complex, compound, or compound-complex sentences can seem like run-ons at times. Giving the reader a variety helps encourage focus in a story. On top of this, know that it's okay that single sentence paragraphs are okay, but having a chapter filled with them isn't. Single sentence paragraphs should be used to make a point. Depending on your school of teaching, a paragraph should be 4-6 sentences long, or longer than 7 sentences.

Doing this may help increase chapter length.

Beyond all those nitpick stuff I had pointed out, the story isn't horrible. I loved that it's easy to tell who is telling the story, and that each chapter not only starts with the the character POV in a fancy way by adding ~ around it. It's very appealing to look at. On top of that, I love the author's limited use of POV change. Changing POV's too much can be frustrating as a reader, but I like that the author limits the confusion by only allowing one POV per chapter.

Another thing that this book does really nicely is how different it is. The author decided to go with a tribal-warrior-like theme for the book. Because of it, the names are appropriately named. Being that it's Pokémon, most of the Eevees and Jotleons have names that are Pokemon based like Arbokpup, using the Pokemon Arbok and placing it in front of pup. It's a great idea as some cultures will encourage unique names such as that to name a child. Doing this, it adds to the warrior-tribal-like feel.

Overall, this book does need some work, but it's certainly on the right track. There's a lot of good things that this book has going on for it. I especially love reading all of the unique names of the Pokémon, which makes it very exciting to read. If you are looking for a book that combines Pokemon with warriors, then look no further as this may be the book for you.

Once again, Diamond435 has agreed to participate in an interview to talk more about her new book The chronicles of Wildheart: Wildpup of Jolteon Hollow. 

JunieWeather: The chronicles of Wildheart: Wildpup of Jolteon Hollow is a very unique story. What gave you the idea of creating it?

D435: A story about an Eevee, and the Warrior Cats book series. Eevees have so much evolution potential. I have read it (Warrior Cats) not to the point of a fan, but enough of it to get a basic understanding of it.

JW: One thing I enjoyed about your book was how unique the names were. How did you come up with the names for all the different Eevee and Eeveelutions?

D435: Though not listed in Pokemon Characters and Arts, the characters I use in The chronicles of Wilpup: Jolteon Hollow are named after their personalities.

JW: Did you ever find it challenging to come up with names for your characters?

D435:Sometimes. There are cases where I name them, and think of names I have to give them. An example is Stonepup. His name used to be Thunderpup until I changed it.

JW: Is there anything you would like to share with those who are reading this interview?

D435:The chronicles of Wildheart: Wildpup has a Warrior Cats spin added to make things interesting. And so will its sequels.

JW: Thank you for allowing me to interview. If you are looking for an enjoyable quick read, this book may be the next one you'll want to check out.

UPDATE: This book has now been taken off of Wattpad. Sorry for the inconvenience.