| Perspectives
Cover Judge: This is a good looking cover. Sets a mood, readable title (although that subtitle at the top is at the size limit) Let's get right into it.
Blurb Judge: Nice! It hints at post-nuclear zombie infection theme, but focuses on prespectives of different people (and maybe even AI? I'm looking forward to that)
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Yeah, AI POV. This can be tricky, because we tend to use our human emotions and sayings and- wait! Are we basically reading the AI's thoughts? They wouldn't be like our human thoughts but more like amounts of data or something.
For example, on the second AI POV chapter, it says "I'm breathing hard" which raises questions: AI breathing? Is this a metaphor for the AI's machine system? We are talking about robots, right?...Maybe I might be misunderstanding.
Just be careful when writing foreign POVs :)
Short simple chapters. Discontinued right on a cliffhanger.
Summary: Good start, keep in mind your world and characters and you should be alright. Maybe add some extra key element, to strengthen your story.
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