Oh yeah, I read this already. But that's besides the point.

It was actually pretty good, despite being short and so sad a theme. Not recommended to read if you just finished a PJ book (which happened to be the situation I was in when I first read it)

The writing in the beginning was quite slow, but the rest had a good pace.

One minor detail: I find the part where Percy yells "Noooooo!" (I counted the o's, they're six of them) slightly cringey and just- not very realistic. Maybe just "NO!" would've been fine? :P

Cover Judge: Okay, not a stellar design, but it fits the theme. And I appreciate the "A Percy Jackson and the Olympians fanfiction" subtitle because if I hadn't known I wouldn't have understood anything of the blurb.

Blurb Judge: Short but enough to capture one's attention.

Anyway, there's not much to criticize about it, being a one-shot. You mentioned you might write more? I think I'm personally past the PJ fandom stuff, but there are fans that will definitely appreciate it. And if you manage to whip up something interesting I might be intrigued...but then again, don't write for me xD

Something I'm curious about: You entered it in the Wattys 2017?