Cover Judge: Interesting theme. Looks like something out of a Studio Ghibli world. Mixed in with Warriors.

Pretty good. I'm not going to criticize on the theme...(YET)

Blurb Judge: Okay. Short, simple and compact. I'm partly interested because it takes some skill to write about, well...cats and magical kingdoms called Aelurus without making it sounds ridiculous.

Yes, I might be saying that your story looks ridiculous. Prove me wrong :)

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Why do you people keep spelling it magick with a c?! I don't know if it's worse than magik with only a k *facepalm*

Okay! First chapter is good. Man oh man am I getting Warrior Cats vibes right now though xD

You've got a queen, a guard, a mage all set up; the bad guys and the main villain; and lots of gore and blood. BTW, if you guys can't sustain Warrior Cats gore, don't read this. I have a very clear image of the axe inside Soroccah's skull, thank you very much Octavia Locke.

I'm trying to understand the species of this world- humans, cat-men, and regular cats?

Ohhh....now I start to see connection to Abbernathy and her two cat friends. Interesting.

I skipped the Queen's POV special because I didn't feel like reading it.

Nice first sentences, connecting to some humor and flashback and cause for the present.

Unexpected bad word there.

Also, how is Lucy the name of a male cat?

And I know the intereactions between Abby and Crum are supposed to be funny, but it's the third chapter and I'm starting to not care about him much.

Also, LOTS of description.

Ohhhh...I get it now. At first my eyes deceived me because I saw the silhouette of Santa's sleigh instead of two cats.

Chapters start to get real heavy and long...

Those cute eyes really do not fit the amount of evil and gore attributed to Feign's name.

Summary: This is fantasy genre. So of course lots of description and giant armies of bad guys fit in. I think the chapters could've been done more briefly- the first chapter was the best, for example. It had suspense at the end, moderate length, and could fit in appropriate description.