The Climb- @AngelCakeszee

"No matter what happens,

I will never stop climbing,

I will never stop believing."

Daisy Willow Snow, is the quiet girl at school that you know nothing about. All you know is what other people has told you and what you see.

The students at Hogwarts see her as a blood-traitor since her mother is a muggleborn witch while her father is a pureblood wizard but also as a bookworm. But most of the time, nobody notices her even sometimes the professor forgets that she's even there.

Daisy wasn't always so quiet through. She used to be very lively in her family. Being the loudest in her family.

But that was before he got sick and before he dies.

That was before they got there letters for Hogwarts.

Before Daisy attends Hogwarts on her own.

Before she caught the eye of one of the Marauders.

But what she does know, is that she will never stop climbing. She will never stop believing.

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Alright, always lovely to start on a positive! It really is a spectacular story! I'll be reading more! WHO IS THIS HE ? I love how you haven't revealed who the man is! It leaves a bit off suspense and really hooks the reader!
I'm presuming it's her dad but I NEED to know!!...WAIT no it's her BEST FRIEND!!!  YESS I THINK THAT IS IT!
Around 4th chapter, I really do love how you are bringing Sirius into the whole thing with a flirty attitude!
Another thing I quite love is the fact that Willow doesn't fall head over heels for Sirius right away. It takes a bit of time + convincing and I really think that is an amazing addition to the story! I love getting to read the progress to loving him! That sounded a little... cheesy?

In terms of feedback, I think you could really go into depth! Perhaps explain her thoughts and describe her surroundings a little more, you seem very capable! As well as this, I think you could use a wider range of vocabulary. Perhaps use different synonyms for a word to describe her and the objects around? 
Here and there I can also see little spelling errors, so you might want to edit your work and look over it before you publish it?

There is just one thing that bothers me, and you can all disagree: House Stereotyping.
When Daisy is insulted, the bullies claim that she couldn't possibly be a Gryffindor because she was quiet, that she should have been in HufflePuff. I, as a fellow Griffin know this is not true, I have a friend in Hufflepuff who isn't quiet.
I'm pretty sure Marnie Saxon was not quiet.

But I really do think your story is onto something here! Keep it up! :-)

- BELLFLOWER_