The Bearer of Good News by @jazzlynn_lr3

I love the name Evangeline. It's so freaking beautiful and I like how you tied her name into her mother's situation and everything about her and her name is wonderful and spot on. I just love the name Evangeline. It's so beautiful.

And I love Evangeline's character too. You've made a super cool OC.

While I really love most things about this fanfic, there were a few parts (one major one which I'm about to discuss) that had me a little... I don't really know how they had me, but I kinda sorta mighta rolled my eyes or like sighed or something. 

The part when there's a party in Hufflepuff. That part was the part where I was like, "wut even???" I understand Hufflepuff throwing a party and letting anyone come, but there were two things that kinda weren't right.

1. There is no Hufflepuff portrait. It's a secret code of taps on a barrel. Yep, the barrel in the center, two rows from the bottom will open to the common room when tapped to the tune of "Helga Hufflepuff." I looked this up to be sure, and it's on pottermore if you want to read the actual article. It's rather interesting. If you tap the wrong barrel, vinegar pours out on you. I find that hilarious.

2. That kid they paid to open the door and "say the password to the portrait"... they're paying him? Why? I don't think they'd pay the kid to open the door. Honestly, I think they'd put a plate of cookies on a table outside the door and leave a sheet of paper taped to the wall with step-by-step instructions on how to get in.

Yeah, that's just my take on it. I honesty don't think they pay someone to open the door.

And what is up with Theadore Nott? Like, can he nott? He's messing with my ship!

And why on this green earth does he know about her dad? Like, um... can you nott? How do you even know about Evangeline? Like, bro, her last name is different. Unless your parents are gossip queens, you ain't gonna know her.

Or maybe he does... whatever's fine.

And it's a minor thing, but there are a few POV changes from third to first person, and that's not good... it's in the later chapters where you switch for a sentence and switch back, but it is something that should be fixed.

Honestly, this is a really good story and I like where it's going so far :)

-Jtsquared4