mental hand slapping
so, i found a little thing that helps eliminate "telling" in your narration:
when u find urself saying "he felt", youre probably showing. delete that sentence and rephrase it into a "showing" sentence.
instead of "he felt angry" try "rage burned in his chest, flushing his cheeks" same thing...but the second one is better, it displays more feeling. It's vivid.
just a little thing.
also,
this is also helpful. color...isnt rly as characterizing as how a character looks. not just "blue shirt, green eyes" it's more like "slumped shoulders, wild eyes, little wrinkles around the mouth"
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