Saviour--A Charlie Weasley Story by: EggoWafflesPotter

Remember, these are just my opinions. Feel free to argue with or disagree with any points I make.

Also, I've never read Harry Potter, so take this review how you will.

So, lets begin. The introduction is very short. There is very little detail to go off of in chapter one. And for someone like me who's not really a Harry Potter fan, I'd have no idea what your characters look like, how they sound, what their personalities are like, or even a hint of those things from chapter one. The chapter also just ends very abruptly. It could ease into the next chapter a little better.

The entire story is just confusing to me, due to how short each chapter is. You're lacking details for things like settings, surroundings, personalities, and the likes. Description is usually one of the most important parts of any story, and when there isn't any it's hard to follow that story. It'll also help chapter lengths as well. 

There are also a few grammatical errors in each chapter. Minor things, easy enough to fix with a second wave of editing.  

The overall plot is kinda confusing to me as well. I don't really understand why this girl can time travel, and what's so important that she can? In a world of magic one would think this kinda stuff is normal, but I mean I don't really know. Like I said I've never read HP.

Summary:

Pros:

Correct spelling

Cons:

The above mentioned

If you're a Weasley fan, then check out Saviour, and see the Weasleys after the battle of Hogwarts like you've never seen them before.