Vigilante and The Prince by KaPowQueen.

Ok so after all that detailed extensive reading, this novel has really been a sight for sore eyes, literally! Because it's a light read I had no problem squeezing in this last review for today. Also note: I only read the first 3 chapters. The farthest I'll ever go for these reviews are 3 chapters.

Let's get cracking.

OVERVIEW

TO THE POINT: It could use work, not my cup of tea, definitely easy on the eyes, still has cliches.

MORE DETAILED:

 This story surrounds an orphaned girl, who is a vigilante, and a Prince Charming from England or Europe I think, who has visited America. But the spin is that she has some strange "abnormal skills." Read the blurb yourself:

"So Damien, or should I say Prince Charming, I have to ask. Why did you agree to do this interview? I mean, after you have avoided speaking to the press for so long. Why Now? I am sure everyone around the world is wondering this too." 

She questions, and the audience goes silent.

"Well... I guess you could say it's now a time to speak to the people. To stop hiding." 

~ ~ ~

No one knows how the once orphan girl with "abnormal skills" survived for 11 years. 

Now that she's 18, maybe it's time to figure why she is who she is. 

 She's the Vigilante.

No one knows the public icon, Damien Felix's, family secrets. 

No one knows he wears a mask 24/7 and absolutely no one knows his plan. 

He's the scandalous Prince.

They both live in secrets, they both want things.

OVERALL, It was an OK read. It's lighthearted, different form the serious dark fiction I prefer. There aren't many descriptions—this book seems like the typical book that would become popular on Wattpad's teen fiction.

Is that a good thing or a bad thing? It's both, depending.

The characters didn't really stand out to me, though you tried KaPowQueen they weren't striking. They were just as cliched as any other teen fiction out there. While the friends come off as likable, how about going outside the box? For more suspense or interesting developments in plot, what about a friend who's two faced that the MC doesn't know about? What about being friends with an old lady or old man vendor. What about having no friends at all because she's a vigilante and can't have others close to her—or they'll get hurt (another cliche here, but I'm brainstorming). 

Do something that would surprise me!

In full, it's a regular novel. It has a nice, light tone to it, and that was a really good thing for me, and anyone whose not looking to invest a lot of analysis or heavy reading into something (especially if you did 2 other reviews in the same day).

I'm going to ATTEMPT to keep this review short.

FULL REVIEW

I review with the following criteria.

COVER:

STORY CONCEPT:

GRAMMAR:

CHARACTERS AND CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT

WRITING STYLE:

PACING/ORGANISATION:

IF IT WAS ENJOYABLE!

for a final score out of 35.

After I time sit by a 100, and give it a overall rating.

1. COVER: 2.5/5

It needs to be more engaging and draw me in. Again, I recommend Canva since it's a great, easy to use software, or commissioning someone to make a cover. I went on Teen Fiction and found some covers that would draw me  in. 

I chose these all purely on their cover and not the story: Sometimes a simple cover does wonders:

2. STORY CONCEPT: 3

Is the story concept original? No. Is it cliched? At the same time, no. It's been around, but not in this combination before. And while you did try to make it unique, from what I read in the first 3 chapters, it didn't stand out that much to me.

3. GRAMMAR: 3/5

There were definitely certain things I had to correct—basic typos and changing POV. After you get to finish your book, which I do hope you do, consider going through and do one huge Spring Cleaning, editing all the typos and anything else that you need to change. Also for your flashback in Chapter 3, be sure to italicize those since readers can get confused!

4. CHARACTERS AND CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT: 2.5/5

You can't get much character development from 3 chapters! I'll just skip right along.

The characters didn't stand out to me that much. I wish in the first chapter you had showed more or introduced us, as the readers, to the idea first of your MC being a vigilante, instead of them talking in a cafe. If I didn't read the blurb, and I did't know any better, I'd think your MC was just another typical girl in another typical teen fic.

And then while you tried to make her BFFs likable, they seemed like ordinary people i've read before in books countless times. The MC's supporting friends/groupies. I advise you invest in them as well. 

needless to say this opinion is all subjective. To other those friends may seem like the most kickass BFFs they've ever read about. But my interests are specifically feared towards finding original, unique works. As I said earlier, this book seems like the typical book that would become popular on Wattpad's teen fiction.

5. WRITING STYLE: 4

Your writing style is very easy on the eyes. I can appreciate that! Haha. Not only because I'm hella tired, but because sometimes less is more. Your book would be great to pick up on a cool day and read while sipping some lemonade/hot cocoa. The best thing to read light heartedly. Especially if you're not someone for rigorous reading. 

I can definitely appreciate it! 4 out of 5 for Writing Style! Whoop! Whoop!

6. PACING/ORGANISATION: 3

The pacing was a bit iffy. The organisation, too, was kind of hard to follow. She suddenly went to bed then not even a single paragraph passed before she was waking up again! And the pacing was fluctuating. From slow to fast, I advise you try to find a middle point and keep it consistent from there.

7. IF IT WAS ENJOYABLE: 5

I enjoyed the read, definitely, and I think you should write more. It's not my cup 'o' tea though. But its clear that many others love it. 

I suggest you apply for more book reviews, particularly those geared towards teen fiction works, and get a review there. For me personally, this type of book doesn't fit my tastes.I still ensured I rated your work fairly, though. 

TOTAL RATING: 23

OVERALL RATING: 6.6

Phew! There we go. That's all for today. Feel free to PM me for more advice and check out something I recently published: SNIP SNIP WRITING TIPS. You simply ask questions about writing and I reply. 

-Echo. 

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