Ok! I've returned from my hiatus and am with the materials to continue these reviews! Production will be slow, these reviews take time to analyse and come up with ways to improve. 

Here is your long awaited review, flowerofpomona! And i do plan to get to you _Sinnamon_Roll_, but I'll be completeing those in queue before yours. Same goes to WOODWILD and OctaviaLocke.

Unsilenceable by flowerofpomona.

OVERVIEW

IN SHORT: Pleasant read, slow build up, a bit ailmess, much potential

MORE DETAILED: Unsilenceable, from what I can remember, tells of a noble lady, Caroline Hastings, who has a disability. This disability, however, is yet to be revealed, as the first three chapters, and most likely the fourth, follow her exploits in rounding up her family for a trip to London.

The first three chapters of Unsilenceable, were aimless, if not a bit unnecessary.

The point of them, as I caught on quick enough, was to introduce Caroline's siblings and give insights to their personalities, pastimes, quirks and daily routines, yet while each chapter was of medium lenght and sweet, I felt that much of the plot could be revealed much faster instead of splitting up the rounding up process into three chapters. 

The introduction of each character was quite obvious, and it's one I've seen before often enough in movies. 

But other than the not to subtle character introductions, it was a very pleasant, light-hearted read, so far at least, and I can only hope the high spirits it's showed won't completely dissipate further into the novel XD.

The review, in full, is below.

FULL REVIEW

I review with the following criteria.

COVER:

STORY CONCEPT:

GRAMMAR:

CHARACTERS AND CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT

WRITING STYLE:

PACING/ORGANISATION:

IF IT WAS ENJOYABLE!

for a final score out of 35.

Afterwards, I multiply it by a 100 and give it an overall rating.

While the cover is not awful, it's still not bright or arresting enough to grab my attention whislt scrolling through a list of books. It would help if the title was larger, brighter and with a clearer font. 

The image in the background could aslo be brighter, even if it's meant to be a particularly sad or hearbreaking novel. The woman walking in agarden is still quite vague, and not much of the image hints at a historical fiction. And without seeing her face not muucvh can be ifnerred or bridged/related to by the reader perusing your cover. 

From the feature: Mid-way writing this review it seems flowerofpomona changed Unisilenceable's cover! I edited this accordingly!

From the blurb, the conflict at centre of the novel is very vague, if not plain cryptic. While it does tell us that Caroline Hastings will develop a disability, it:

❯ does not specify this disability

❯ it does not say why this is a disability 

❯ it doesn't outline what's at stake and,

❯ it doesn't say why she should overcome it

If you need any help writing a blurb, there was a question submitted in my Snip, Snip Wriitng Tips book, which can be accessed on my profile, on how to write blurbs, but I will outline a few tips here in addition to that post. 

If you've any time, please take a glance at it for a few pointers, (cue shameless promotion) and it is also always open for questions to be answered. View said book for more details. 

C'mon.

While you shouldn't recite your entire plot and story word for word, if you leave it too vague and indecipherable, then it won't do the best job at drawing your potential reader in. 

Your blurb is an invitation, to potential buyers, and an invitation shouldn't only be addressed to their name and stop there. 

Your original blurb reads: 

❝It seems that every person who has ever walked this earth knows what being disabled feels like, whether it be emotional or physical. It's just a matter of whether one makes themselves stronger than their disabilities by refusing to let them triumph, or if they give in. ¶ If one makes themselves​ stronger than their challenge, they'd be unstoppable. 

And that's what one peculiar young woman is about to learn. 

She has a disability. ¶Now, whether her particular disablement is emotional or physical is yet to be determined, but for Caroline Hastings, it's very real. ¶What she doesn't know is [that] all she has to do is [become, be, insert word here] strong enough to win, or be willing to let her adversary conquer.

But in a time of family drama, high society, remembering manners, confusing romance, old foes, and tension raising high in Europe, Caroline knows one thing's for sure: [w]inning has never been easy.❞

A few tiny nitpicks and corrections:

a. There are many times you could have begun a new paragraph, particularly whenever you begun a new idea. I edited your blurb, and added a ¶wherever a new paragraph could be made. 

b. The second sentence of the third paragraph aslo ahs corrections I specify above:

c. Winning, after [sure:] should not be capitalised—while it is a quote or finishing remark, it is still a part of the same sentence. 

Now that we have the blurb cleared up, the rest of the story concept gets the score that it did, becuase the main plot of the novle has still yet to be specified or even breached, except the fact that Katherine will be getitng married and the Hastings family is going on a trip to London.

For the msot part your grammar was correct, but I did spot a few errors and a slip up in your dialogue tags. I best addressed the example I found, but do edit your novel or any chapters you can and ensure all your tags are consistent.

a. "Point taken." Alice grinned as Katherine headed for the door. "Oh and ALice?" She stopped. 

I'm guilty of this myself. After a comma, question mark or exclamation mark, the word following the closed quotation mark must be in common letters, unless it's a proper noun.

This bit should now read: 

"Point taken," Alice grinned as Katherine headed for the door. 

"Oh and ALice?" she stopped. 

b. And another example: 

"Alice..." She began.

Correct: "Alice . . ." she began.

This is a matter of style, but it's usually best to space your elipses, like this [. . .] instead of [...]

c. "Oh dear." Katherine shook her head and. . ."

Correct: "Oh dear," Katherine shook her head and. . ."

All in all, it's just really a matter of knowing that after ?, ! and ./, you should still have the following words common, as they're still a part of the same sentence. 

Your characters so far, as they've been introduced, do seem interesting enough yet they haven't stood out or spoken to me.

Amelia Hastings is the typical mother excited and busybody, semi-matriarchal and puctual social butterfly. 

Alice's personality was told more to me than shown, which isn't a very good thing, and the fact that the three chapters going through trouble to introduce and feature each sibling even exists, is enough indicator. 

These methods of introducing characters is not my preferred. It's very outright, with little subtly and too much telling in 1 chapter, than showing that could be done gradually across 20. 

This bit, especially, got me. 

❝"Let me guess, one's male, about 6'0", probably seventeen years old, messy brown hair, blue eyes and fair complexion? And the other's female, around 5'10", also about seventeen, dark chestnut hair, blue eyes and fair complexion with some rosy cheeks?" (Rory and Caroline were the only ones to inherit their mother's blue eyes)❞

This was in a dialogue, yet while I can appreciate the fact that you didn't outright describe the twins in detail, to think that Mr. Alan has this much photogrpahic memory and can perfectly describe the colour of their hair, eyes and their sepcific height?

I hope you see where I'm going XD. 

I don't have any advice on how to improve this, and if I were writing this I'd remove this all together, but to adjust this section it'd help to keep it vague but still informative. For example:

"Let me guess, one's a tall male a head taller than mine, shaggy brown hair, light eyes and light skin? And the other's an equally tall female, same brown hair and blue eyes, with high, rosy cheeks? (Rory and Caroline were the only ones to inherit their mother's blue eyes)

Yikes! This is personal opinion, but if I were editing this novel myself, I would clip this section all together, and reveal their charactertersitics and physical atrivutes in bits and pieces elsewhere, scattered across the novel. 

Your writing style was very immersive and descriptive, yet at times it got a bit too descriptive, a fault of my own I'm very guilty of. 

My only advice here is that sometimes, less is better, and split up large chunky paragraphs across the novel, or in different parts of the chapter.

The pacing and orgnaisation gets a 2.5/5 becuase, again, the first chapters felt unnecessary in how they introeuced the siblings, and it took long to get to the build up.

Of course I can't pull a review from the first three chapters, or judge the overall novel's apcing based on the first three chapters alone, but in terms of drawing a new reader in, these chapters woudln't do the best at forcing that reader to read on. 

Or at least, it wouldn't force me. 

Did I absolutely LOVE IT!??!!! <3 <3 <3 ❤️ 💙 💜 

Well, not really. 

Historical fiction in and of itself isn't really my preferred genre, but from the chapters I;ve read so far, nothing has grasped my attention enough to compel me to read on. But do, apply to more reviews and get third and fourth and fifth opinions, and keep Unsilenceable as your main focus! Thank you for shring your work with me.

TOTAL SCORE: 18.5/35

OVERALL RATING: 5.3

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