GENERAL FICTION/HISTORICAL FICTION [CONCLUDED]
FIRST PLACE: The Art of Defiance by @random_reader_writer
Title: 3/5
Plot: 9/10
Characterization: 9/10
Cover: 4/5
Description: 5/5
Grammar: 10/10
Creativity: 9/10
Total: 49/55
Review: Really love the fact that the protagonist, a high, mighty Lady, is living in British Empire as an "outsider" (an Indian). Your book reminds me of Othello. Anyhow, I enjoy reading the book. Thank you for entering the award.
SECOND PLACE: That of a Nostalgic Future by @immatrytoread
Title: 3/5
Plot: 9/10
Characterization: 9/10
Cover: 5/5
Description: 5/5
Grammar: 9/10
Creativity: 8/10
Total: 48/55
Review: Your characters are highly relatable. Your work reminds me of Blue_the_Bard a friend of mine. Not sure if you guys know each other, but both of your works are amazing! Congrats on getting nominated for the RCA, btw. Love your book, I'll continue to read it in the future. Thank you for entering the award.
THIRD PLACE: Within the Palace Walls by @-jolyne-
Title: 3.5/5
Plot: 9/10
Characterization: 8.5/10
Cover: 2.5/5
Description: 4.5/5
Grammar: 10/10
Creativity: 8.5/10
Total: 46/55
Review: Your writing flows wonderfully and flawless, in my opinion. What I would suggest is to get another cover. Had you have a better, more professional looking cover, you'd have be the first place. Thank you for entering the Award, I enjoy your book much.
Burdens of Blood by @LaLaiq
Title: 4/5
Plot: 7/10
Characterization: 7.5/10
Cover: 3.5/5
Description: 4/5
Grammar: 7/10
Creativity: 8/10
Total: 37/55
I Am Your Maid, Nothing More by @theCertifiedbawse
Title: 2.5/5
Plot: 6/10
Characterization: 7/10
Cover: 3.5/5
Description: 3/5
Grammar: 8/10
Creativity: 7/10
Total: 37/55
Review: I think it would be better for you to separate the author's note at the beginning of chapter one into an author's note on its own. I know you want the readers to be aware of what they are diving into, but some people would repel away from such a long and flowery introduction. They come for the story, and if they see such a long author's note, they might assume that you're the type of author that rant more about your personal life than writing. If you're still afraid people skipping author's note then turning on you, I'd advise shorten the author's note at chapter one down to 3-5 lines (ie. "Thank you for giving my book a chance. Please be aware that there're some Mature contents in this story.")
Saving Emily by @taislebaron
Title: 1/5
Plot: 5/10
Characterization: 6/10
Cover: 1/5
Description: 3.5/5
Grammar: 8/10
Creativity: 6.5/10
Total: 31/55
Rose Cut by @CammieTea
Title: 4/5
Plot: 3/10
Characterization: 4/10
Cover: 1.5/5
Description: 2.5/5
Grammar: 6/10
Creativity: 5/10
Total: 26/55
Review: Your opening, which I supposed is to be emotional and reeling, falls flat. I'm talking specifically here at the italicized words. One grammar error that would cause confusion is: "Dre smacked the small women across her face" (inconsistent pronounce and ownership). Now, let's discuss the narrative. From the beginning, it's unclear who's narrating: the girl ("Rose"?), Dre, or the woman ("Lupita"?). Since you jump to the first narrator right after the flashback, I advise you to go back and make sure the readers know the girl is hiding behind a corner or something, watching Dre abusing the woman. Another problem is that you don't set up a setting. Just dialogues floating from nowhere. Where's this exactly take place? Rose's childhood home? What's Dre's appearances? How's he create a traumatic affect on Rose? Maybe clarify what "shit" did Lupita hold from Dre. Go back and flesh out those little details of the beginning. Another thing I want to talk about is Dre. Dre seems so flat right from beginning, appearing exactly like a villain that exists to do bad thing because he likes that. I, personally, think having a fleshed out villain is better than a fleshed-out protagonist since villain will drive the protagonist to hell and back. So make Dre sympathetic, make his anger or his abusive behaviour, use Lupita to your advantage and starts portraying the extreme of a toxic relationship. Make him to admirable that when the readers realize he's terrifying, they are unsure and left in a turmoil. Not sure you get what I mean, but, basically, make Dre the man of American dream while, in fact, he's a Satan.
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