Rating: **** stars
What I liked: I liked how you managed to convey how empty the man felt. You did a great job at how sorrowful and sad he was. I like your plot. It's really good.  And I'll give you an A for your grammar. (;

What I didn't like: First off, I don't really like the blurb. It's too vague for me, without much detail. However, it is a slight bit intriguing especially if you read on. I didn't ever really feel as though you really described your character, but only that he was numb to the pain. That was how I interpreted it.

Any pointers: Go back and edit your work. I didn't catch any mistakes, but that doesn't mean you won't. Or maybe want to change a few things . Good job :D this story was intriguing.
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