Rating: ***/
What I liked: Your description. It was truly magical. I liked your aunt's character and the main character. You write very well. I ask liked how you used Latin for your spells. (Copying JK Rowling? ) 😉 yours is a good story. I feel like you need a better opening chapter. It was well-written and you seemed to lack any grammar mistakes. I did not catch any.

What I didn't like: I felt that you lacked conflict. It's a cliche story that has been done before- Merlin. Maybe it's not that cliche, but you can make it very original. I feel like you need to have more stuff happening in the chapters. No one wants to read about an almost perfect life. However, since I only read the first two chapters; I have no idea if you've added more conflict.

Any pointers: Add more conflict, be it minimal. Magix is great and all but maybe there are dangers to performing magix? Make it real. You have to have conflict and always leave the reader with a sense of wanting more. :D  you have a good plot so keep on writing!(: but don't forget to polish up your work.

HallieTheWriter