VIVIENNE: kalopsia-ws--

To start, we are sorry for the wait. But I'll get on with rating your story now! There had been a few punctuation mistakes and some mistakes where you wrote your characters talking but made some words lower cased. For example, "Hey, how are you?" She asked, smiling. (This is the correct way). Not, "Hey how are you?" she asked, smiling. But do not take that to offensive!! I do that literally all the time when I'm writing it's so minor and not even that big of a deal. Other than that, you're good with spelling, etc. I haven't seen Criminal Minds but I've seen bits & pieces of the show, so this story was kinda new to me. The plot I liked a lot, it really hooked me in. I loved your main character so much. I can already tell you spent a a lot of time on her backstory and explained it pretty good, which is great! Most writers should be doing this & not totally rushing into their story/rushing their characters development. I don't think there's anything else I really need to add? I hope your story comes a long way & I can tell most people will be into it because I for sure was!