Sooooo, winners make sure you have done all the stuff like Following your judges etc. If we see that you haven't, no winning bby.

Before that please read how to get your sticker and certificate.

1) Message the community account

2) Mention your position and which genre

3)Mention your email

I know, I know before we had links buuut they don't seem to work for anyone. So, I will hand them out individually >.< It might take a bit, but I'll send them out so please message the above stuff immediately. Results are at the very bottom of the page.

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Judged by: @MiniMoxx

1) RED TAPE by @variationinmotion

Title: 5/5

Cover: 5/5

Blurb: 3/5

Grammar/punctuation: 18/20

Vocab: 8/10

Descriptions: 13/15

Plot: 8/10

Dialogue: 17/20

Writing Style: 10/10

TOTAL: 87/100

Review: Your Title and cover are great! The blurb could be a little better? Maybe tell us if there's a

theme running throughout the collection etc. The blurb doesn't really reach out to me so maybe

have a think on it and see if you can really pull us in with it.

Ah, the first story was just heartbreaking. I had a suspicion it was alzheimers. You write the reality so

fluidly, it's amazing. (have personal and professional experience with it) Your writing with this one is

great.

Very minor and very rare typos so well done :D

The way you write is really great, and I felt with every story it was completely different – I never felt

one voice was the same. So well done!

Your descriptions are great, I would only slightly suggest a little more? Maybe of settings or voices. I

can't quite put my finger on what it is I'm looking for (really unhelpful I know – sorry! Lol) but what is

there is wonderful.

Your stories are wonderful, and they capture the characters of each so well. You're a great writer,

keep it up! :D

2) THEIR INSECURE SUB @jiyarani

Title: 8/10

Cover: 4/10

Blurb: 7/10

Opening chapter: 4/10

Grammar: 10/15

Originality: 12/15

Writing style: 2/5

Plot: 5/10

Enjoyment: 3/10

Genre relevance: 5/5

TOTAL: 55/100

Review:

The title is effective and works.

The cover – it just (in my personal opinion) is just cheesy and turns me off personally. I like the fonts

though, the way you've set the title out works on the cover.

The blurb is good, however it needs tightening up. I would say the parts about James' family is a bit

irrelevant for my first impression. Maybe it would work better if you reword it. Maybe "He is a shy

and innocent person who is afraid of people knowing his secret. Everything in his life is about to

change..." &lt; still does the same but stays relevant. I'd also get rid of 'they are gay and in a

relationship with each other' – just keep it to the fact they're in a relationship.

There were some grammatical issues throughout.

The narrative of breaking the fourth wall is something I personally don't like, HOWEVER I think you

seem to do it well. However I have found that the narrative does give us some unnecessary details

and I think you could do with maybe tightening your writing to fit this. For example, we don't need

to know what shifts James does, the time the bell rang.

I think along with this, the descriptions could be worked on. There are some good beginnings of the

dialogue, I think it just could be deeper.

I found the story of how a 12 year old would be drinking alcohol to point of getting drunk, then get

sexually assaulted and beaten a little unbelievable. I don't understand how that would also leave

him unconscious for 2 weeks.

The change of POVs doesn't work I don't think right now. My advice would be to a) not do it so fast –

a paragraph isn't enough for a new narrative, b) make the voices distinct from each other. I also

don't understand why there's then a 3 rd person narrative. It really doesn't work? I found your 3 rd

person narrative to be more engaging, so my advice would be to stick with that.

The sexual words really don't need to be censored. You have already labelled the story mature. Also

– a man would not have a clitoris. I would check the 'inside my wet pussy' line. A man does not have

a vagina either. I also don't think men would 'role play' having a vagina either even in fiction.

Overall: I think you have the beginnings of something that works. I however would suggest

tightening things up – the narrative feels a little awkward, everything moves so fast and I kind of

don't really feel connected because of the lack of descriptions. I really would suggest working on this

as your plot has potential but right now you need to work on the writing. But like I say the plot of

dominant men and a thruple really intrigues me.

3) PERCEPTION @LynaForge

Title: 10/10

Cover: 10/10

Blurb: 10/10

Opening chapter: 6/10

Grammar: 14/15

Originality: 12/15

Writing style: 4/5

Plot: 8/10

Enjoyment: 8/10

Genre relevance: 5/5

TOTAL: 75/100

Review:

The word choices in this piece really bring home the writing. It's so neat and polished. The

descriptions are lovely.

My only critique really is that I would have liked to have more emotional descriptions in there. It

kind of felt rushed a little. Like for example; her baby died. It kind of felt rushed and void of all

emotions for something so utterly heartbreaking. Even in the fantasy/old times, she would've had

emotions. I thought the same for as I went along. You have the beginnings of the emotional depth

there and whats there is so well written, I just felt like more is needed to really bring out more.

Your characterisations are great and I can really see whats happening in the story.

I didn't see any errors so well done!

The narration is good. I really felt like I got to know the characters. The way you portray mc is

lovely. You give her depth and flaws compared to the versions we think we know. Well done!

Overall, you've done this so well. I really like your writing and the way you've retold this. Really

Clever!

4) STUCK IN FOR THE HOLIDAYS @Crazylonleychick Book (+10 for judging)

Title: 8/10

Cover: 4/10

Blurb: 5/10

Opening chapter: 4/10

Grammar: 2/15

Originality: 6/15

Writing style: 2/5

Plot: 3/10

Enjoyment: 3/10

Genre relevance: 4/5

TOTAL: 41/100 (51)

Review: The title is good. The cover could be a bit better – I can barely see the words and the font is

a bit bland.

The blurb is okay but could do with spicing up. It has a few grammar issues as well.

Grammatical issues in first chapter with the dialogue and tags. They just need tightening up. For

example you need punctuation at the end of your dialogue. You use small sentences when you could

use commas and make them longer.

The story seems VERY dialogue heavy. You can slow it down by adding descriptions in – currently

there's none. What do people look like? What does Joy smell? What does the airport look, sound like

etc. The lack of atmosphere and descriptions unfortunately makes the prose fall flat. I don't know

anything about the characters and that's what the story needs.

There's spelling mistakes littered throughout.

I feel pretty lost in the second chapter. It's all dialogue and it doesn't give me any plot. Why does Joy

only go out with famous people? Are Jack and Joy dating or not?

Overall: the plot has potential – there could be lots of drama, lots of intrigue. However, there's lots

of errors that need sorting out. Spelling/grammar being one of them, and also less of the dialogue. I

didn't find one piece of description and in a light, fluffy piece like this is, you need it. I don't know

anything about Joy apart from the fact she hates Christmas and she likes to date famous men.

I would seriously advise you to tighten up your writing and edit this. It has potential, though!

5) A best friends wedding by @Malittledreamer

Title: 10/10

Cover: 10/10

Blurb: 8/10

Opening chapter: 10/10

Grammar: 13/15

Originality: 14/15

Writing style: 5/5

Plot: 10/10

Enjoyment: 10/10

Genre relevance: 5/5

TOTAL: 95/100

Review:

The title is good! The cover is gorgeous – though I would potentially use a new font?

A little spelling error in the blurb but otherwise good if a little short.

Holy cow the descriptions are AMAZING. I can see everything, you've really captured the anticipation

and feeling so well.

I love the way you weave their story through this small snippet of a wedding. It's so cleverly crafted.

I noticed one or two spelling mistakes.

The story is just so heartbreaking and I really want to know what happens next! You bring in the

characterisation so well, so littered through the story and you left me wanting more and more.

Your writing is so well done.

Overall: lovely, lovely story. It's unique as well because of the way you've crafted it. You've taken

something so relatable and well, so often written about but you've made it your own! Nice work!

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Judged by: @RaphaelStout234

1. Dragon: Myth of the Bermuda Triangle written by CroodsGirl

Results:

Title 9/10 Cover 10/10 Blurb 10/10 Opening chapter 9/10 Grammar 14/15 Originality 15/15 Writing style 5/5 Plot 10/10 Enjoyment 10/10 Genre relevance: 5/5 = Total 97/100

Review:

I loved the author's originality and her writing style. The pacing was just right, and I enjoyed reading this book. Will's encounters with the humans and the ocean was well-written and the characters are well-developed. The grammar was wonderful and very descriptive.

2. Autumn Leaves written by writer13writes

Results:

Title 9/10 Cover 8/10 Blurb 7/10 Opening chapter 10/10 Grammar 15/15 Originality 15/15 Writing style 14/15 Plot 10/10 Enjoyment 9/10 Genre relevance 5/5 = Total 87/100

Review:

This short story was beautifully written. It was very descriptive, and the poem was very beautiful. I loved grammar and punctuation. I loved the way the author described the character's emotions and fear. The author has a beautiful writing style which I'd love to see more of.

3. Chrysalis written by M1Y7S1E3RY

Results:

Title 10/10 Cover 9/10 Blurb 8/10 Opening chapter 10/10 Grammar 15/15 Originality 15/15 Writing style 4/5 Plot 10/10 Enjoyment 9/10 Genre relevance 5/5 = 95/100

Review:

I loved the author's writing style and her short stories. The different stories were beautifully written and had lots of originality. The first story or "opening chapter" gave me a peek into what I was going to expect for the rest of the book. Beautiful writing, amazing description and awesome grammar.

4. When the daylight has faded written by mellimack

Results:

Title 9/10 Cover 10/10 Blurb 9/10 Opening chapter 10/10 Grammar 15/15 Originality 15/15 Writing style 5/5 Plot 10/10 Enjoyment 10/10 Genre relevance 5/5 = Total 98/100

Review:

I loved the author's descriptive writing style. Especially with the first story, it drew me in with her beautiful writing and the character's belief in her dream. The originality is very creative and outstanding. The grammar and vocabulary is beautiful and I enjoyed this book. The plots of the different stories deserve a 10/10 because each one is different and has a beautiful, sometimes very surprising outcome. I hope to see more of the author in future.

5. Reflection written by Mikrokosmostae

Results:

Title 10/10 Cover 9/10 Blurb 8/10 Opening chapter 10/10 Grammar 14/15 Originality 15/15 Writing style 4/5 Plot 9/10 Enjoyment 10/10 Genre relevance 5/5 = Total 94/100

Review:

I loved the plot of the story, and the writing style. The grammar was amazing and the originality excellent. I liked the opening chapter because of its description, the character's emotions and her memories of the place. I could feel the character's emotions when she returned home, and I loved it when the author described the family driver. Beautifully written and I enjoyed the book.

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Okay oof! This took a while to compile. So if i made some mistake please let me know >.< also, if you're a judge and I didn't add +5 marks, let me know because I'm super busy and trying to release these results simultaneously! So I might miss something xD ESSP, If I counted someone's score wrong and you have actually earned a position

First position:

When the daylight has faded written by mellimack 98/100

Second Position:

Dragon: Myth of the Bermuda Triangle written by CroodsGirl 97/100

Third Position:

 A best friends wedding by @Malittledreamer 95/100

Chrysalis written by M1Y7S1E3RY 95/100

Congratulations bby <3 We are so proud of you! Don't feel disheartened if you didn't win, we love all the books and this is just a stepping stone.

All the Winners you can have your stickers through the way mentioned above. If you don't know how to add them to your book, then feel free to message the community account. If you'd like a more detailed review or don't like how your book was judged then feel free to pm the respective judges.