Book:
Running from the Dark by MoonRadianceBooks

ANALYSIS

Plot: Jake and Jacob are twins that were separated after their parents got a divorce while they were babies. Jake was raised as a normal boy by his mother but the opposite was the case by his father. Suddenly Jacob seeks out his brother Jake and things start to go downhill because of their meeting.

Characters: The main characters are Jake and Jacob. The minor characters are their family and Jake's friends from school.

Writing Style: It started with a 3rd POV for the introduction to the birth of the boys. After which it was 1st person for the rest.

It is a very dialogue focused book.

Spelling and Vocabulary: I saw in the comment that it is supposed to be a Southern Accent. So I can't really comment on the vocab. However, I found it hard to read some dialogues.

EVALUATION

Overall Impression: It doesn't really qualify as high school romance. It fits more into just the high school genre. The romance story seems like a side thought as opposed to the brotherhood drama and school drama.

Strengths and Weaknesses: The story line needs a bit of work and reviewing.

Reading the writing seems like Jake retelling a story instead of him experiencing the story.

Recommendations: It would be nice to note who is speaking by putting the character's POV before the start of the chapter.

Despite the book written in 1st POV, try to tone down on the use of I to start the sentence. You can use a passive sentence structure. (For example: Instead of, "I exhaled and looked at the house across the street," you could say "Just one look at the house across the street and an exhausted sigh left me.")

I suggest adding more physical descriptions and show of emotions. Add flesh to the dialogues.

Target Audience: 13-18

Reviewed by Kanye_Ariel