Review by Nish - The colony
Title - The colony
Writer - A_girl_who_writes_2
Reviewer - Rising-Queen
Cover - 3/5
Title - 4/5
Grammar and punctuation - 5/5
Summary -5 /5
Reader engagement - 3/5
Character building -4 /5
Writing style - 3/5
Plot originality -4 /5
Total - 31/40
Review - first of all I absolutely loved the book's summary.
This is some crazy idea on wattpad and I was intrigued the second I read it. As you mentioned it's a love traingle but I am still confused why there's only two people on the cover. Nevertheless cover is great but can be made best by adding a dystopian background and threw survivors or a traingle shape in between with a single quote that defines your book.
In the beginning writer has clearly shown what are the side effects on health and psychology on the people, as the female lead is unaware of dogs and fascinated by the idea of pets and dogs. I have noticed that instead of naming the chapters something fascinating, The writer has only wrote the name of the character who's perspective it is based on. That would be worked upon.
Beth keeps describing her survival life in the colony which gives readers the idea of life but instead of revealing all the things in her thoughts I believe the writer could enhance it by giving the readers the lifestyle of civilians by talking to other civilians like them discussing about a serious issue, let's say they are running out of carrots and then the writer shows how serious this problem can be as agriculture is a difficult occupation in colony and a meeting is held where they are discussing the declining rate of the fewer animals they have which is again a very serious issue. Such concepts can add charm to the story and enhance it further.
When she's having the conversation with Hamilton after her mother died, I believe the sentences of her's can be more elaborative. She's going through sorrow and blames it on Hamilton I believe making her lines straight forward won't give as much effect as the longer lines would give.
Adding about a disease that has affected all the people in the colony would be great too. What I mean is, maybe a birthmark that everybody is born with. In the summary it was mentioned it's been 100 years since somebody had their periods then how did hans and Emily had a son? Is it through science that she was able to have a baby? Please specify it in that particular chapter itself. I wonder no scientific research was made to make sure if the radiation is still active or not? I know it's not easy to experiment but maybe they tried something as an object to see how it goes? I think the story is rushing in chapter 6.
Make things go slow with Beth and Tom, let them explore their emotions in adverse conditions and add hints of confusions.
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