Author: animagination

Title: 5/5 - I like it, it's very original.

Cover: 5/5 - I think this cover is quite sleek and professional. Definitely a very good cover. The placement of the image and the text on the cover makes it look pretty good.

Synopsis: 4/5 - I like how you introduce both of your characters here. I get a little understanding of what type of people they are before the story actually starts. You're probably wondering why I only gave you a 4 if I liked it: I feel like it is a little cliched. There isn't  anything wrong with that, it just doesn't feel very original.

Plot: 4/5 - I just feel like I've read this so many times before: good girl refusing to go to a party, best friend (who is a crazy party-goer and has nothing much in common with the MC) convinces her to go. So yes, I do find that phone conversation a little lacking. I don't want to suggest anything because this is your story, but I definitely think that you could maybe change this a tad and introduce the friend later on.

I did like the second part of your story. The parents of your MC are so darn cute, especially the dad cuz he wants to swim in the pool. Hahah, maybe they should make one for him. Dallas' mum seems uber nice and I think the descriptions from this point onward were really good, I could almost imagine myself there.

Characters: 3/5 - I think you need to consider what kind of personalities you want all your characters to have because right now your MC comes across as a really unlikable person, at least in my opinion. She seems like a cliched version of a real 'nerd' in terms of how she acts. I mean, it's cool to be a little hermity but why was she so mean to Dallas? That's just cruel :( He didn't do anything to her. I think there are parts of her 'voice' as it were, that I actually enjoyed so you definitely have something there but just expand on that. I don't mean make her perfect because that isn't realistic at all, but make her at least relatable. I don't see why your MC is friends with Beth, she has such different opinions. I guess I just have to wait and see how the story develops.

Dallas definitely seems like my favorite character at this point. He's so joyful and happy, it's not something that is usually seen as people prefer to write about the moody, dark guys. So that aspect was refreshing and I quite liked that.

SPG: 5/5 - There were a few errors with punctuation here and there but it was nothing major that disrupted the flow so I didn't deem it necessary to mention it. This was actually a pretty neat chapter, there was only one obvious mistake I spotted: 'There were multiple groups...' not was. Other than that, good job.

OVERALL: This story flowed very well, and in terms of your SPG it is one of the better stories I've ever seen on wattpad. However, that's all good and dandy but your actual chapter is a bit meh to be completely honest. I think that you do have a good idea and it could be made into something amazing but the little parts (the phone convo, MC being rude to Dallas for no reason, her general oddness) kinda made me not want to read on and I think if you went over that, you could definitely create something amazing.  (Obvs I will, I really do like Dallas. :) )

WOULD I RECOMMEND: YES

TOTAL RATING: 26/30