Author: Abluefiction

Title: 4/5 - I like the title, it suits your theme and goes very well with you cover.

Cover: 5/5 - This cover is absolutely amazing. I love the way the colours go together and the images are superimposed on each other very well. This looks like a professional and sleek cover.

Synopsis: 5/5 - The synopsis was flawless, I have nothing to say about it other than it flowed very well. The words fit together in such a way that I just can't wait to actually read the story.

Plot: 5/5 - Definitely an interesting plot. I love the way you have built up the scene, the descriptions helped to further strengthen it. The whole premise of her being in the dungeon to sold. I do have so many questions and that is definitely enough to make me read on.

Characters: 4/5 - You have an interesting MC, and, in time, could be extraordinary. The old woman does sound bloody cruel and I like the way you have portrayed her.

SPG: 3/5 - This chapter sounded very disjointed and stilted. This is mainly to do with the phrasing of your sentences and such. I have highlighted some examples for you to see what I mean.

-'Wish I could follow' not 'would'

-'His were heavy' not 'was' because the word 'feet' is plural.

-'She's the youngest' you're missing 'the' which I kindly added.

OVERALL: This is a good start to your story (the poem is flawless btw) and I think you can definitely do something great with it.

WOULD I RECOMMEND: YES

TOTAL RATING: 26/30