Author: smallwinter

Title: 4/5 - It's an interesting choice but it works.

Cover: 5/5 - It's a beautiful cover that suits your chosen genre.

Synopsis: 5/5 - Flawless! I'm hooked immediately from reading this.

Plot: 4/5 - It was amazing and I loved it. However I feel like too much was happening (hence the score.) I think you can split it up into another paragraph every time you had ---- because it was a new setting each time.

Characters: 4/5 - The first scene with Tyler wasn't awkward at all. I could see that you tried to make it so but it just didn't come out that way. It felt like he was a friend your MC was still close to, she leaned on his lap and made him dinner. To me, it felt like she was a tad bipolar or something because one minute she was cool with him and the next instance she hated him. That was a bit confusing for me. However I did like the friendship between Riley and your MC. I think you portrayed that friendship well.

SPG: 4/5 - You have a few mistakes but a good proofread should tidy that up for you. I made a short list of some of the more obvious mistakes.

1.    You're missing a comma between 'you' and 'anyway' so it should be 'why didn't you, anyway'

Again, there should be a comma between 'morning' and 'by' so 'Morning, by the way'

2.    Sometimes you use commas where full stops are needed and vice versa.

3.    You're missing punctuation at the end of your dialogue.

OVERALL: This was a delightful read and I loved it. I think you should consider what I said about the length of your chapter but other than that, a very good piece of work you have there.

WOULD I RECOMMEND: YES

TOTAL RATING: 26/30