Author: LetterInABottle

Title: 4/5 - It's unique, I'll tell you that. It is a bit of a mouthful to be honest with you but that's nt necessarily a bad thing.

Cover: 4/5 - I like your cover, it kinda reflects your story. Pretty creative.

Synopsis: 5/5 - You went straight to the point but left out the right amount of information to create a mystery.

Plot: 5/5 - The plot is well thought out, great start for the first chapter.

Characters: 4/5 - Sophie's appearance at the end then running away didn't seem to fit in with your story flow. I feel like her characterization was a little rushed and you didn't develop her well enough. I know you wanted to add her in but maybe just allow Theo to see her then end the chapter so you are able to create a sense of mystery with her. Theo, I like. He wants to be normal but he can't because of his overbearing mother and a father who wants to hide everything. I love your description about Lucas. I would love to hear more about him in the later chapters.

SPG: 4/5 - I did spot a few mistakes here and there but nothing a good proof reading can't fix.

OVERALL: Definitely an enjoyable read, you had a lot of emotion in this chapter and if you carry on like this, I predict great things for you. Amazing first chapter, well done.

WOULD I RECOMMEND: YES

TOTAL RATING: 26/30