Author: worldgirlalways

Title: 3/5 - Personally, I think it sounds odd. I don't feel like this title reflects your writing well.

Cover: 5/5 - This cover is amazing! I love how you have a pic of a guy holding a camera - it goes well with your plot.

Synopsis: 4/5 - ( I don't know if it was done intentionally but |I|'ll point it out anyway)'you get the gist' You're breaking the fourth wall, your characters isn't supposed to interact with your reader. The idea is very good but I feel like you could improve the delivery. Sometimes it sounds stilted and doesn't flow as well as it could have. Having said that, I loved the ending where Nolan wants your MC to help him break up the relationships of his ex girlfriends.

Plot: 5/5 - I love the idea, it's very unique and innovative. I enjoyed reading the story and the plot seems pretty strong as well. I loved how you started with the egging of the house and I was engaged all the way through.

Characters: 4/5 - The secondary characters were odd (the sister's friends). I feel like you didn't give them enough detail to make them come alive. You also told us that one of them was a goody two shoes. I feel like you could've SHOWN us how she was instead, maybe by describing the way she acted. The MC was, on the other hand, a perfect character. I could almost image her as a real person. I loved how she was coerced into helping Nolan. Again, he was also very well created (which is the main thing, I guess. Your main characters were relatable which made your story an enjoyable read.)

SPG: 4/5 - Nolan refers to your MC as 'snob' which becomes the noun (substitute name) therefore it should be 'Snob' whenever he is addressing her. Some parts are a little jumpy, like there isn't enough description. For instance, the part at the beginning where the girls are yelling at your MC, it just didn't flow as well as it could've.

OVERALL: A good first chapter, a few issues here and there but a good proofread and I'm sure it will clear right up.

WOULD I RECOMMEND: YES

TOTAL RATING: 25/30