Author: melaniepatrick

Title: 5/5 - I love the title

Cover: 5/5 - Your cover is amazing, whoever created it is very talented.

Synopsis: 4/5 - It's interesting and immediately grabs my attention. However my first problem with it is that it's a block text and my tiny 3 second fish brain gets tired. I would suggest you break it up a little. My second problem is that your synopsis doesn't reflect your writing style for this story. I felt a little confused when reading your story because you used a different jargon. I would suggest you change this because then it would be better for your readers to decide whether they want to read it.

Plot: 4/5 - I think it's a very interesting idea you have. I do enjoy the mystery and it definitely grabs my attention. Maybe it's moving a little too fast though.

Characters: 4/5 - I love the way you developed Emerald, it's almost as though she is a real person so good job on the descriptions, they were amazing.

SPG: 3/5 - There were some typos here and there, also a few misplaced commas but otherwise your first chapter flowed pretty well.

OVERALL: This was a good opening to your story. You have a strong plot and it managed to pique my interest. Well done!

WOULD I RECOMMEND: YES

TOTAL RATING: 25/30