Author: Scribblescribble

Title: 4/5 - I like this choice, it kind of suits your theme.

Cover: 4/5 - This is a beautiful cover. I love the image and the placement of text. In terms of relevance to your chosen genre (which is Paranormal) I would have said it didn't suit but because you are drawing on themes from Japanese folk-lore, I think it works beautifully.

Synopsis: 5/5 - I thought that your synopsis was very well written, I couldn't find any mistakes which made it flow very smoothly. I was hooked from the beginning and I want to find out more.

Plot: 5/5 - I'm not well-versed in Japanese folklore but from what I read, it seems like a very interesting topic. This chapter was amazing; your powerful descriptions and harrowing imagery blew my mind. You have a strong idea which makes for a promising story. This chapter flowed well and you had just enough information to keep me on my toes and wanting more. It was absolutely beautiful.

Characters: 5/5 - I loved how winter was personified into this scary woman. (Small thing, when you said she was sans clothes except her hair, that is wrong. Her hair is a part of her and thus doesn't qualify as an item of clothing.) Damn, does she want to kill the baby or something? I mean, I sympathize greatly with the mum and everything she is going through but damn, that poor child. Her depression is so real, so strong, I can tell she doesn't want that life. I love how she decides that the reason why she feels no love for the child is because the child is not normal. You effortlessly described the new mother's dark and murderous thoughts, they left me on the edge of my seat biting my nails.

SPG: 5/5 - I found minute mistakes when I was reading this chapter but they had barely any effect on the overall outcome of your story I almost overlooked them. For example, I think you are using commas too much and in the wrong places.

OVERALL: This story was beautiful, mind blowing. All I have to say in terms of how you can improve is maybe go over the chapter and proofread to remove those pesky mistakes.

WOULD I RECOMMEND: HELL YEAH *cough cough* I mean YES. (Can't be showing favoritism and shizz :) I need to follow the pattern.)

TOTAL RATING: 28/30