Author: tularula789

Title: 4/5 - Odd title, definitely unique. It's a good name.

Cover: 3/5 - If I'm completely honest, I find your cover to be a little tacky. The bold black writing doesn't match the overall theme of the cover. I would suggest you either invest in a better one or create it yourself.

Synopsis: 5/5 - This is a hooking synopsis, I couldn't stop reading to the end. I loved the beginning more than anything, it set a jokey, sort of rebellious tone for whatever comes next.

Plot: 5/5 - The pace was set out just right, and you had enough descriptions so that a reader could fully imagine what the scene looked like. I loved both parts here and you really went deep with her injuries- I liked that.

Characters: 5/5 - The mother's reaction was priceless, and I loved your MC's reaction to it, too. What a freaking lazy arse police officer! I instantly take a liking to your MC and I can't wait to see what happens next.

SPG: 4/5 - Your SPG was really good here, just a few minor mistakes you could easily fix when you proofread.

-'"You bet I am," he snarled' you need to have a lower case after a comma in dialogue.

-'All of her arms were numb' she only has two. 'both her arms were numb'

-Most people don't like it when people use bold to highlight their points, maybe try using italics instead.

OVERALL: This was an almost flawless chapter. If you remove those pesky mistakes I've noted above, it will be absolutely perfect. I honestly loved reading this, I was engaged throughout and I couldn't wait to find out what would happen next.

WOULD I RECOMMEND: YES

TOTAL RATING: 26/30