Author: The0riginalArtist

Title: 5/5 - It has definitely caught my attention. I think the word 'Murder' is what makes it stand out to me so good job.

Cover: 5/5 - I can't seem to read the writing in white because it is too blurry and small. however the colors on the cover go very well together and make it a very pleasing thing to look at.

Synopsis: 4/5 - It has something good there. I think you can expand a little more on the second paragraph and it will be amazing.

Plot: 5/5 - There wasn't much of a plot but the way you wrote this made me give you a 5/5. I was engaged all the way through, waiting to see what you will tell me next.

Characters: 5/5 - I love the way you have painted these 'murder magicians' it is so cool. The whole story had this sense of mystic and suspense around it, especially surrounding the magicians and what they do.

SPG: 4/5 - This section is better than a lot of stories I have read so thank you for making my like a tad easier. Nevertheless, you need to look over this part:

- The first sentence does not make sense. That imagery needs refining, eg. 'The black ink splattered on the thin? Thick? parchment paper like blood oozing from a freshly cut wound, staining a shirt red.'

-'exist...right?' you don't need the capital R after the '...'

-'They bar up...' you forgot the 'y'

-You have a few commas missing but it didn't disrupt the flow of the story.

OVERALL: I thought that the idea was flawless and apart from the few mistakes I highlighted above, it was also executed incredibly well. You have a lot of skill.

WOULD I RECOMMEND: YES

TOTAL RATING: 28/30