Author: UnspokenWords98

Title: 4/5 - Interesting name. I like it.

Cover: 4/5 - This cover is nice. There is a cool theme going on, the colors have this warm tone to it that I find works really well. It could be better, though.

Synopsis: 5/5 - This is a powerful blurb. I'm instantly dragged into the story, waiting for more. The only thing I'd suggest is that you proofread it because you have commas in odd places that disrupt the flow. Otherwise, good start. You tick off all the boxes here.

Plot: 4/5 - Okay, so the first thing I noticed was the whole definition of a word. To put it bluntly, I've seen it way too many times in wattpad books, frankly, I'm bored of it. However, upon reading more, I like the way you have written it into your story. Quite seamlessly, I might add.

There was a little bit of confusion when your MC went to see Blake. It sort of jumped from her answering the phone in someplace (another thing I feel you need to add more to, the description of where she is. All I get is that she's next to a window somewhere and looking out at trees.) then BAM! she's walking into a room with a mahogany desk and talking to Blake.

Other than that, you have an interesting story plot forming and I'd like to see what happens next.

Characters: 5/5 - I find that your character descriptions are flawless. Your MC 'Ella' felt like a believable and strong heroine. Ahha, damn! Alpha Thantos has me worried about what will happen next.

SPG: 4/5 - I think this needs a good proofreading, by generally your SPG was pretty good. Below is a list of some of the more obvious errors I found:

'Forever bound they're, to the ground that holds them captive' There are two main things wrong with this sentence.

1. The comma is not needed as it disrupts the flow. This leads me to the second point

2. 'they are' not they're. That doesn't make sense.

-Again, 'Yes, I am' not 'I'm'

-'I can't place a finger on what it is, but I know it's there' this sentence is in the present, but you are using the past tense: 'I couldn't put my finger on it, but I knew it was there' I have fixed it for you here.

-Again, 'that sounded familiar' not 'sounds'

-This is probably a typo but I'll point it out anyway: 'These records' not 'this'

OVERALL: This is a very good start to your story, straight into a problem I find is the best way to keep me interested in a story. The plot is developing very well and I'd like to see what your MC and Blake do next.

WOULD I RECOMMEND: YES

TOTAL RATING: 26/30