Author: lilabby_

Title: 5/5 - It's very interesting and makes me want to know more.

Cover: 4/5 - You have a simple cover but somehow it speaks volumes. I like it.

Synopsis: 3/5 - I like the general gist of it however I feel like it can be reworded to make it flow a little better.

Plot: 5/5 - I love the way you opened this chapter. I got goosebumps from reading it. I would definitely want to read more and to know why did her two friends commit suicide. It's an interesting plot, I can say that much.

Characters: 5/5 - You depicted Jaycee as being broken, a shell of what she used to be. I love how you make her come alive; it's almost as though I can feel her pain. I know you said it was based on a real person and you captured that pain and suffering extremely well. Your writing holds all those emotions which wash over the reader.

SPG: 3/5 - You have multiple errors here. Some of which are spelling mistakes while others are to do with your writing style. Your story doesn't flow as well as it could. I suggest you read over it and if you still can't figure out how to fix it, you can go to the editorial section and get someone to help you.

OVERALL: This is a very powerful first chapter, apart from the errors I noted above, this story was amazing. I really felt the emotions you were portraying so a very well done to you.

WOULD I RECOMMEND: YES

TOTAL RATING: 25/30