Author: chasingchase_

Title: 4/5 - I like this title, it has a nice ring to it.

Cover: 3/5 - I think it's really simple and that works well. Having said that, it doesn't really stand out much so if I were to come across it, I would just flick past as it's not that eye catching. Maybe think about getting a better cover. It also doesn't reflect your genre so I think it's important you change it because you want potential readers to instantly know what they are reading.

Synopsis: 3/5 - It's interesting enough but I don't feel like it's laid out in the right way in the sense that you are just feeding me information. (I suck at blurbs so I can't help you there) but maybe think about different ways of rewording it. Having said that, you have an intriguing story line and I can't wait to see what happens.

Plot: 5/5 - I love the idea that they created this collar thing that enables them to transform into animals. The beginning was engaging and I was immediately drawn in. I loved how this flowed really well, amazingly so considering the weird element of turning into a dog. It was written so seamlessly I never missed a beat 'Oh you're gonna get caught Rodney, pop on your collar and turn into a dog' I was like, damn, you do that son and get the hell out of dodge. But on a serious note, I feel like you've moved this story at a reasonable pace and the cliffhanger ending has made me want to find out how the other people/ things? can be animals without using the collar.    

Characters: 5/5 - I love the banter between Rodney and Xero. Firstly, well done in choosing non cliched names for your main characters. They are instantly given this 'normal' personality (kinda like they are your everyday typical kid) that makes it so much easier to connect to them.

Secondly, I like how you've given them original and unique but quirky personalities. They have this sort of intrigue about them and I want to know more about how they created and alter the collar.

SPG: 4/5 - This section could do with a good proofread. There wasn't anything too major which is a good thing but I've only picked up and listed a few (there were too many for me to jot down all of them) they are quite small error so I'd understand if you miss them completely. Try reading this piece out loud, that always helps me. 

-I don't know if this is right or not but I'm thinking it's 'oblivious to the boy' not 'of'

-'pulled out a pen' not 'pulling'

-'Outlining the lock, smoke rose from the cabinet and the lock fell into his hand' this sentence needs rephrasing. I get what you are trying to say but it's not written in the right way.

-'Replacing his human body with that of a dog's' I'm assuming it was a typo here.

OVERALL: This is an amazing start to your story. You have a strong plot line and good main characters. I definitely think a better cover is needed because yours right now doesn't give your story any justice.

WOULD I RECOMMEND: YES

TOTAL RATING: 24/30