Author: LamoThatsSoCliche

Title: 2/5 - Personally, I don't particularly like this title. Yes, your themes are to do with fame but I'm sure you could come up with a more interesting title than this.

Cover: 3/5 - Your cover is mediocre at best. I find it a bit tacky and the images aren't blended well together. Also, if Case Saunders is a male, why is there a girl on your front cover. These things need to link as it is the first thing people will see.

Synopsis: 4/5 - You have an interesting synopsis. I really like it. However sometimes it sounded weird because you were missing some punctuation so maybe go over that and fix it.

Plot: 4/5 - I loved the ending where you introduce this strange and mysterious girl jumping over fences lol. This was an interesting start to your story. I think the ending was more hooking than the beginning but I have no qualms that you'll get better from this point onwards.

Characters: 4/5 - He has some nice arse teacher though. Oh my God, I would have loved to have her. Small issue though, I don't think it's quite so realistic to give the guy a detention for taking Case's paper. Maybe a warning would be justified but not a punishment of that severity.

Case is a little... *insert groaning noise* I really would've liked him to fight his own battle. He's a little wimpy at the moment. (Don't change that though. If that is his character then leave it.)

SPG: 4/5 - I thought you did a little too much telling and not enough showing at times so maybe go over it and add more imagery. You also used '---' in the wrong place. 'Why is he picking a fight right now!' Sounds perfectly fine without the '---'

OVERALL: This was a good and interesting start to your story. I think you have a solid idea that you take run very far with. Good luck.

WOULD I RECOMMEND: YES

TOTAL RATING: 21/30