Author: OreoandMint

Title: 5/5 - I like it, it's kind of sweet. It reminds me of Taylor Swift a little bit so that's probably why I like it so much.

Cover: 4/5 - Your subtitle is written in yellow which kinda clashes with the background so it is impossible to make out. Other than that, the cover is amazing.

Synopsis: 4/5 - Some grammar and punctuation issues here and there. Also, it sounds a little funny in some places. I would suggest you re read though it again and clean it up a little. However I did obtain the general gist of it and I'm intrigued, your synopsis pulls me in.

Plot: 4/5 - You have an interesting plot so far. I would love to know more about the elusive and mysterious grey beanie guy so that's definitely a plus. I'm not quite sure people give tips to cashier people so that is a bit odd. Sydney's story seems interesting though.

Characters: 4/5 - I kinda like Mr grey beanie guy, he's adorable! I love how he's a little awkward but sweet. I love his generosity and I would enjoy knowing more about his story. Sydney on the other hand, confuses me. I haven't decided whether I like her or not. I think that might be because of the whole 'begging for fun' thing. If she begged for money because she needed it, that would have been cool but she clearly doesn't. She has a scholarship and a steady job so she has no reason to dress like a hobo and beg. I don't feel she is a good character, someone I would enjoy reading about however you did create a very convincing character which is why, even though Sydney kind of pisses me off, I'm giving you 4/5.

SPG: 3/5 - I found some spelling mistakes, like you were in a rush and missed a letter or a word out. Your tenses were all over the place which confused me; past or present? For example: Most of them 'were' nickles, not 'are' (this is based on the paragraph which was written in past tense.) You can easily clean this up by reading through your work again or getting an editor to do it for you if you want.

OVERALL: This is a good first chapter, you definitely have some strong points. I would suggest you read over your work again and see if anything I have mentioned above makes any sense to you.

WOULD I RECOMMEND: YES

TOTAL RATING: 24/30