Author: TheVenn 

Title: 5/5 - Interesting title, to say the least. It is a bit ambiguous in terms of linking to your genre but I find that I like that. Quite a few werewolf stories on wattpad end up with the dodgy 'mated to my alpha' or 'My alpha's prisoner' or something else as cringe-worthy. I liked that your story didn't have that.

Cover: 4/5 - This is a good cover and I like the colour schemes but in terms of relation to your genre, it has none. That is the main reason why I only gave you a 4 and not a 5.

Synopsis: 4/5 - This is a pretty cool synopsis, I can't wait to see if your story lives up to this awesomeness. There were no mistakes that I could spot which made this a seamless read. I'm definitely intrigued to see where you'll be taking this idea.

Plot: 5/5 - This was a perfect chapter in my opinion. You didn't have too much going on but what you did include was so powerful and heartbreaking, I loved it. The imagery and description really built this scene well and gave it an ooph. As a first chapter, this definitely ticks all the boxes for a hooking and engaging start to a story. 

Characters: 4/5 - I noticed that you said your MC's father is almost going to 'move on' and that her mother would be 'plunged far too deep in sorrow.' Isn't mid sixty a tad too young to die? I'm just throwing it out there, it would be your choice to maybe change the age or something.

Your MC is really smart and intelligent person. Her voice is interesting and I thought she was quite a refreshing and fully developed character. Omg! Leo's death was absolutely bloody sad. I thought that you created his character very well even though I only knew him for a little while, his death still got to me and I liked that. The MC snapping the guy's neck was a bit odd in terms of her being so blasé about the act. Maybe you could think of adding a tad more thoughts to spice that up.

I liked how you didn't add too many characters here so I was able to keep track of who was who. This made connecting to your MC a lot easier because it was mostly her in the beginning with reference to your secondary characters.

SPG: 4/5 - You had a few errors dotted here and there, nothing major. I've compiled a short list for you to see where I noticed the mistakes.

-'Too tired' not 'to'

-'Lead them' I'm assuming this was what you meant to say, not 'lead the'

-'you, I'd quit the lying' maybe you're missing a few words here? I'm not quite sure what you are trying to say.

-Instead of using '-' when  saying 'give me the bag' try using '...' they show off what you're trying to convey better than the '-'

OVERALL: This was an amazing read. My heart was in it and I just couldn't help myself reading till the end. However, as much as I loved your story, I will not be reading any more of it because I'm a delicate little thing and I just can't take the heartbreak. Having said that, I do want to know how it ends so I will be adding your story to my library. I wish you the best of luck in the future.

WOULD I RECOMMEND: YES

TOTAL RATING: 26/30