Author: ABitterBrit

Title: 5/5 - I like it

Cover:  5/5 - Whoever created this cover is amazing. I love the placement of  the title and the image used. It kind of goes with your title.

Synopsis:  4/5 - It does intrigue me that's for sure. I think your last sentence  sounds a little funny to me, wording wise. Maybe you could rephrase it  somehow?

Plot: 4/5 - Interesting plot however it does drag on at points and rushed in others but generally, it's a good idea.

Characters:  3/5 - I kind of like Mr Philips, he sounds like an awesome teacher. I  love the dry humour you use and I enjoyed the banter between your  characters. Okay, to you main character Sedona. I feel like you haven't  fully developed her. I don't feel like I was completely engaged with you  writing and there were times where I felt that it was a little flat.

SPG:  3/5 - It should go without saying that you have an impressive  vocabulary. However I don't feel like the words you used adequately  described a high school student, especially because this is first  person. People don't think like that (at least I know I don't) which  made following your story a little harder for me because I was unable to  connect with your character. The words also didn't flow very well and  the descriptive words felt a little forced.

OVERALL:  Personally, I didn't particularly like this story as well as I could  have. The idea seemed promising but I feel like it wasn't  executed well. I suggest you could either change the POV or maybe use  other words, especially because this is supposed to be a teen fiction  and I don't know many people who would be able to connect with your  first person character. Having said that, you did have a few moments  which made me laugh. Maybe it's just me but I wasn't able to engage with  this story. I'm sure other people would like it so please don't be  disheartened and carry on writing.

WOULD I RECOMMEND: YES

TOTAL RATING: 24/30