Author: JuveriyaNazneen

Title: 4/5 - It's a good title for a paranormal story.

Cover: 5/5 - I like this cover, it's simply yet it conveys your theme well.

Synopsis: 3/5 - It sounds a tad odd to me (I dunno how to help you on that because I have pretty crappy ones myself) I suggest you play around with ideas and see what comes to you. I think it is a bet vague and doesn't have a specific direction to it so I kinda find it all over the place. Also, after a comma, the next word needs to be a lower case not an upper case.

Plot: 4/5 - You have an interesting idea, I liked how you described the dream, that gave me goosebumps.

Characters: 4/5 - I think that you have successfully managed to create a likeable MC. I was able to connect to her and I did feel sorry for her at certain parts.

SPG: 3/5 - Personally, I feel like this chapter could benefit from a good edit and a proofread. I spotted a few mistakes during my read through your chapter and compiled a short list of the ones that I felt were the ones disrupting the flow of your story.

1. You have commas in the wrong place (I won't point them out because there are just too many and I don't edit)

2. use lower case after all commas, it only needs capitalization if it's a noun or after a full stop/ question mark/ exclamation mark.

3. 'All my might' not 'All my mighty'

4. Full stops are not needed after question marks.

OVERALL: Your plot idea is amazing and I think that you can do so much with it but maybe try focusing on the execution. (It wasn't as good as it could have been and I don't think such a creative idea should be wasted)

WOULD I RECOMMEND: YES

TOTAL RATING: 23/30