SYNOPSIS:

❝Avarice is as sweet as any sin... and avarice is as sweet as the bodies it burns.❞WHEN HER BEST FRIEND IS KILLED BY THE LYCANTHROPES, Cerise finds herself caught in the crossfire of her dark desires and tangled up in a web of deception. The wolves are attacking in the east, the witch is preying on her from the west, and the worst part of it all? She likes the disease.

GENRE: PARANORMAL 

Author: chloeirene1

Title: 5/5 - I love the title, it is unique which is a good thing because then it is memorable. I also love the meaning 'extreme greed for wealth' which sort of gives me an idea about what your story could potentially be about. 

Cover: 4/5 - For me, the cover doesn't really work. I say this because I'm not a fan of the dull kind of look. I'm all about block colors and attraction. Also, the title is a tad hard to read so I have to knock a point off for that. Having said that, I do have to point out that it gives me a little bit of a red riding hood feel and therefore hints at the paranormal elements so if I wasn't me, then I could see the appeal. (Lol, I hope that makes sense. I try to be objective so although I don't like it all that much, I can see why others would.)

Synopsis: 4/5 - Eh, it's getting there. I would have liked it to be a little longer and I don't think capslock is all that necessary so maybe change that to lower case. 

You are displaying an interesting story and I am definitely intrigued to see what it could be about. 

Plot: 5/5 - This is a flawless first chapter. You have amazing flow and writing style with the way that you tell the tale. 

Oh God! I have a horrible feeling something is up with the mother. I love your descriptions and the wording of your sentences. I am able to imagine the scenes that you are painting like I'm there and seeing it for myself. 

Characters: 5/5 - This chapter is paced well, and it moved at a good rate which gives you good character development.

While we never meet Lydia alive, a lump rose to my throat when I was reading about how Cerise was describing her. 

Cerise herself seems like a well rounded character, someone I feel is a good, strong heroine, and a good protagonist for the story. Her immediate likability makes your story that more enjoyable to read. 

I am curious; how did the father's bone snap? What happened? Because a bone doesn't randomly decide to pop out of place. That was the only part that confused me. 

SPG: 5/5 - You had no major errors. I do suggest you read over it maybe once because there were a few commas that were lacking. However that did not take away from the story so I saw no need to deduct marks. I have pointed out only two of your lacking commas but I know that you can easily find out the others. Try reading it out loud to yourself, that usually helps me figure out where a comma goes. 

-'torn apart, (comma) and had...' 

-'Across from me, (comma) a man...' 

OVERALL: I'm sorry that I can't really provide you with many improvements. I think you have a fabulous story as it is. This is one of the most amazing, well written books I've ever had the pleasure of reading. 

WOULD I RECOMMEND: YES

TOTAL RATING: 28/30