Author: avonstarlite

Title: 4/5 - It sounds okay to me, I can't say much because it can't be too specific to one genre as you are covering a variety of them.

Cover: 4/5 - Considering this is a compilation of short stories, the cover kind of suits.

Synopsis: 4/5 - You cover most of the genres so I understand that this is a general synopsis. Nevertheless, it works.

Plot: 3/5 - This was very cliched but for some reason, I kind of liked it. Having said that, I feel like your pace was too fast and many things weren't explained properly or I couldn't get a feel of your MC's reaction to certain things. Eg, she finds out the cute guy killed someone and the next thing she does is give him a hug and clean his wounds. It doesn't sound right. (Also, if he killed someone {allegedly, because then he says he didn't} shouldn't he be under investigation or something? It didn't feel real to me, I just couldn't connect. Maybe try adding more information to in to beef it up a bit.

Characters: 3/5 - I think you have a promising range of characters but they feel too underdeveloped and too stereotypical. For example, the 'mean' girl slapping her because her dick boyfriend went near. Your MC is a tad nuts to want to spend time with a killer. He may be good looking but that is just pushing it. I would suggest you make him be convicted of a lesser crime, like drugs. (This is just a suggestions so feel free to ignore it.)

SPG: 3/5 - Firstly, I noticed that you don't have paragraphs. This made it harder for me to read your story because it was just one huge block text. Okay, so I compiled a short list of a few of the mistakes I caught:

1. '...felt like I'm ready' here you have two tenses; past and present. This makes your sentence a tad confusing to read so stick to one tense. I see that this is written in the past tense so we go with that '...felt like I was ready'

2. I noticed you use uppercase a lot to show that someone is yelling/ screaming (Whatever). This is not necessary and some readers prefer to read italics over caps. Also, simply showing the reader how the person was acting is actually enough. Eg, "I'm not going!" I yelled, slamming my door shut in their faces" (This isn't from your work btw, I just made it up as an example)

3. You are missing a lot of punctuation in the dialogue and normal thoughts/ descriptions. For example, you put; 'okay okay' so maybe change this to 'Okay, okay.' Then tell us how she says it. Does she roll her eyes and sigh or does she mutter under her breath. Small things like this add more depth to your character.

Make sure you proofread your work, that should help get rid of the majority of the errors.

OVERALL: This has potential to be a great story but I think it needs more work. I also feel like your MC makes brash decisions (Which is cool if that is the type of person she is) but maybe let us understand her thought process more because I can't, for the life of me, imagine why anyone in their right mind would want to be friends with a psycho killing manic just because he is hot and 'lonely'. However, I seriously enjoyed the part where she randomly hugs Justin.

WOULD I RECOMMEND: YES

TOTAL RATING: 21/30